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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So I read charity. You really did write an auction story. It was really great. I love almost everything about it. The only thing I didn't like was Roy calling Ed Sweetheart. It was really sweet and hot at the same time. I liked how you mixed humor with hot, sticky, sexiness. :)
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April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well well this story was exceptionally hoooottt!!! just a very very spoileriffic, i had to scream an skip over some parts trying to banish them from my mind so i can actually be surprised when i watch them lol Other than that this story was whew! *fans self*
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April 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm This was so sweet, I have no other word for it... Sweet hot and lovely :)
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April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A flawlessly crafted story that made my heart skip no less than four times- a possible record.
The plot was simple yet effective, I really expected you to do more with the cultured bastar- less than gentlemanly person... but thankfully you didn't have him as anymore than a plot device and 'protagonist opposing force'- something that every good stories need.
(Don't you just hate it when the 'lusting pervert' captures the 'spunky protagonist'- despite the fact that the pervert is a pathetic villain and the protagonist can look after themself just fine. More often than not, the capture and possible molestation/rape of the main character is merely for the sake of sappy hurt/comfort/overcoming of issues plot and is rarely pulled off well. So glad you didn't do that, it's been done so many times!)
Anyway, to your sexual descriptions: very well done, not too many over used phrases- though I did see 'captured his lips' a few times! Other than that though, you obviously gave originality to the sex scene and oooh, did I mention that the romantic bed sex was adorable (we all knew Roy was a softie, really!)... though I'm a little disappointed that there was no kinky wall sex. *Pout* Oh well, I'll have to make do with the kinky slave scenario, not to mention the collar and leash...
And before I forget, was the cat Roy found the one that Al wanted to adopt in episode... 13? (I think that's the one- it's when Ed and Roy have the duel in the parade stadium, one of my favourite episodes.) I just love the idea if it is that cat, Al would be glad it got a good home. *Is a cat lover* ^_^
Best regards,
*Shadow In Flight*
The plot was simple yet effective, I really expected you to do more with the cultured bastar- less than gentlemanly person... but thankfully you didn't have him as anymore than a plot device and 'protagonist opposing force'- something that every good stories need.
(Don't you just hate it when the 'lusting pervert' captures the 'spunky protagonist'- despite the fact that the pervert is a pathetic villain and the protagonist can look after themself just fine. More often than not, the capture and possible molestation/rape of the main character is merely for the sake of sappy hurt/comfort/overcoming of issues plot and is rarely pulled off well. So glad you didn't do that, it's been done so many times!)
Anyway, to your sexual descriptions: very well done, not too many over used phrases- though I did see 'captured his lips' a few times! Other than that though, you obviously gave originality to the sex scene and oooh, did I mention that the romantic bed sex was adorable (we all knew Roy was a softie, really!)... though I'm a little disappointed that there was no kinky wall sex. *Pout* Oh well, I'll have to make do with the kinky slave scenario, not to mention the collar and leash...
And before I forget, was the cat Roy found the one that Al wanted to adopt in episode... 13? (I think that's the one- it's when Ed and Roy have the duel in the parade stadium, one of my favourite episodes.) I just love the idea if it is that cat, Al would be glad it got a good home. *Is a cat lover* ^_^
Best regards,
*Shadow In Flight*