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OMG!!!! Poor poor Kakkarot!!!! LOVETHIS STORY IT'S AWESOME!!!

I am really enjoying this story! The writing is very good, and the story itself is fun, so far. I hope to read more of it soon. ^_^

Another excellent chapter! Keep up the fabulous work.

wow me like this chapter

Yet another great chapter. I do wish they were longer though, with my reading speed I usually finish a chapter that size in less than ten minutes. I'm kinda new to betaing, but I can assure you I wouldn't leave anyone hanging. That is just plain RUDE! If I couldn't beta someone's work properly then I would inform them and help them find someone who could. Sorry about the rant, but I would want someone else to give my work the same respect I would give theirs. I'm thinking about writing a story, but I'm a bit insecure about it. I'm notorious for screwed up time lines and huge plot holes. I also just don't know where to end a story, so they just run on and on. Kinda like this review, huh. I'll shut up and go away now. Update SOON!!

I love your story and hope to see more soon. Do you have a beta, because I noticed a few mistakes in writing? I know someone who might know of some natural ways to help, if not cure your son of his illness. If you would like to know where to find the info, then email me at ultistarmon@hotmail.com and I will get in contact with them to help you.

hey, ^^
good job. *liked it*

poooooooooooooooooor kakarott.
wow and what a really, REALLY poor guy,
who has that "streching - someone´s- ass - job" XD !!!
god. i wonder what the preconditions are to get that job XD *giggle*

but your story is nice written and fluently readable.
you have a good writing style, in my opinion.
oh, and it´s very interesting that you´ve started with this tradition thing.
it really existed such a rule, you know. in england, scottland, ireland, france, netherlands...
so in different times through different aera´s.
ummmh. no heck, i donno the english word for it, but it´s called "proclamation" ( i think! but i am not sure if it is the correct word for it.) lords and all the big cheese´s, were allowed to take the bride,
in her wedding-night and of course all of those women were the king´s subjects.
and it had worked, well. it had have two special reasons. the first : to get all the rich ones into the country. ( yay! rising taxes more money!) the second one: to "breed" the other ones out of the country... ~.~
so, i really think your idea is interesting and also creative and it has also logic, if one thinks about it. ^^
i am looking forward the next chapter! keep on, please! ^^ bye.

man i can't wait for the next chapter

You should write more. I want to know what happens next! Don't hold his story hostage for a certain amount of reviews, please! The plot might die in your mind as you wait. I look forward to reading more someday.

O.O Wow.. that was hot. -passes out from a nose bleed-