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August 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well...that was a tense moment between Goten's boyfriend and Trunks. I can't imagine it was comfortable for either of them, and you wrote that very well. :)
O.o Goten's not going to give Trunks much room, now is he. Can't say that I blame him though.
O.o Goten's not going to give Trunks much room, now is he. Can't say that I blame him though.
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July 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOW, THIS GOT REALLY GOOD!! HOLY COW, PLEASE UPDATE MORE! So does Goten really feel strongly as Trunks does? Is Trunks going to accept himself? I wanna know! Oh, by the way, the romantic moment was one of a kind, I can't wait for more of them! ^_^
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July 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hehehehe, not necessarily smooth, but that last lie Vegeta told Goku was a good one. *smirks*
Okay.
The fight scene was intense and excellent to read. Don't see very many good ones around much any more. :)
I feel very sorry for this Trunks to have to find out that information this way. Is he ever going to be able to forgive himself?
And how much exactly do Vegeta and Gohan know?
Excellent chapter!
Okay.
The fight scene was intense and excellent to read. Don't see very many good ones around much any more. :)
I feel very sorry for this Trunks to have to find out that information this way. Is he ever going to be able to forgive himself?
And how much exactly do Vegeta and Gohan know?
Excellent chapter!
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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O.o Oh, no...what was the former Trunks doing that would lead to that?
What was the former Trunks doing that would have Vegeta and Gohan plotting against him?
and what the HECK does this sentence mean: The freaking Goten’s father knew from the beginning that there was something wrong with him.
GAH So many questions, and too few answers!
:D Which means it is excellently written!
What was the former Trunks doing that would have Vegeta and Gohan plotting against him?
and what the HECK does this sentence mean: The freaking Goten’s father knew from the beginning that there was something wrong with him.
GAH So many questions, and too few answers!
:D Which means it is excellently written!
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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oooh. I wonder what Trunks saw. Probably some sort of attack. The story gets better and better. :) Keep it up.
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July 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
...damn cliffhanger chapter ending. -_- very evil. Its not even like you NEED the cliffhangers to keep us coming back, every second of the story makes us ask enough questions we'll be back for the rest anyways! ^-^
Things are getting even more twisty now, and I have to admit that I have NO clue as to quite where this story is going. I kinda like that. ^-^
Things are getting even more twisty now, and I have to admit that I have NO clue as to quite where this story is going. I kinda like that. ^-^
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love your latest chapter, you've done an excellent job in strengthening the relationship between Trunks and Goten beautifully. Please update as soon as you can.
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
God Damn It! Now I gotta know what was on that laptop, what the hell Vegeta meant by "the one before him", and what could be so BAD that it made Gohan and Vegeta act like friends!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Aaaaahhhh, my brain is gonna explode soon if I can't figure this out!! So in light of all that, please update really soon!!!
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
An excellent detective story ... a great whodunit!
...an edge of your seat thriller!
... just the right mix of intrigue and suspense ... as well as humor ^_^!
Thank you for writing this... it's great! i just can't wait to read the next chapter...i am literally hanging on the edge of my seat!
Keep up the good work and continue! I love it!!!
...an edge of your seat thriller!
... just the right mix of intrigue and suspense ... as well as humor ^_^!
Thank you for writing this... it's great! i just can't wait to read the next chapter...i am literally hanging on the edge of my seat!
Keep up the good work and continue! I love it!!!
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is your best yet! You are learning more of the nuances of the English language more. Just a few minor things to work out. You have really captured my attention with this one. Keep it up. :)