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yeah new chapters. Nice work, the story really rolls nicely. I'm enjoying greatly, it's my favorite.

Yay, were to the part where it left off on the other site. I've been hoping that I would be able to read more of this great fic eventually. Finally, I can see what happens next. Pretty please, update as soon as possible.

nice! vegeta's growing his tail back!? please update as soon as you can!

I thought I would write a review for your story even though I have only skimmed over it since I am adding to the hit counter. It is full of detail from the parts I read and i like fanfics that include Android 18 as a minor character. I do not know why though ._.;;

Hi B here. This is turning out to be a very interesting story so far.
The character interaction is intense and very emotional with Vegeta questioning himself as well as Goku. You get the feeling that Vegeta's really the one that's lonely and in need of someone to except and understand him.
Those dreams and flashback Vegeta had about his dad you could really feel he loved his father. Especially in his chapter when you wrote “So you see…it wasn’t…” Vegeta’s chin dropped slowly to his chest. “…wasn’t Papa’s fault…”. Many fic writers portray Vegeta's father as an ass and smear him, but the anime never gave me that impression. I always thought that king Vegeta had high hopes for his son and Vegeta was killing himself to live up to them, but out of respect not obligation.
I love the explanation you created for planet Vegeta's weather, and the time of chaos it created. Much like before our own planet learn about the eclipse, everyone went crazy thinking the world was going to end or the devil was touching the world, etc, etc. It was tied in very nicely with Goku's current condition too.
I have to wonder what happened to Chichi in all of this. You kind of hinted she was going to show up later, that she'd lied about going over to help Ox King. Or I could just be reading too much between the lines. Guess I'll have to wait and see (always love fics that keep you guessing at the plot).
I'm a little confused about what time the story takes place. My first impression was after the Buu Saga, but when Vegeta was considering going to Bulma for help with his tail spot, he mention trusting both Bulma and Trunks to fix the problem. That kind of implies Trunks is older then say 8-10 years of age.
The ending of this chapter was hot. What a pleasant way to wake up. I do prefer Goku to be the more dominate lover, Vegeta can be in charge in public and Goku when in private (Robert Jordan's "Wheel of Time" reference to the Sea Folk Marriage custom- anyone else know what I'm talking about? If not, good book series, I highly recommend). I also like Vegeta's clueless nature regarding Goku's ‘scent’; I really bet he didn't see it coming.
I'm very interesting in the mental rant Vegeta will most likely have in the next chapter, and any conclusions he might make. Is he going to write it off? Is he going to turn a cold shoulder to Goku? Is he going to except and explore the thought of "them"? Is he going to hide behind his and Goku's families and loyalty to them? Does he love Bulma? Is he going to conclude the only why to get Goku to remember is to sleep with him? (Little far fetched that one, but you can't blame a smut lover for tossing the suggestion out there, ne?)
Anyway hoping you've got your next chapter plotted out and started. Looking foreword to it.

B-chan AKA Saiyanb

i like the nakedness ^_^
cant wait for the next chapter!
xxxxxx

Just tell me one thing: How many fics have you read here or on other sites? And how many of them have you reviewed? Surely not all of them. Do you go to public libraries to read for free? Surely you do the same you are accusing others but don’t consider yourself doing “art thievery”, right? Then why are you accusing and bashing people like that? This is a public site, people are not obliged to pay in any way for reading, and nobody obliges you to put your works here. You should be grateful for the people who deem your work worthy to be read instead of treating them like some kind of “criminals“.

That is SO cute!OMG! Kakarot watching over Vegeta! Awwwwww...
Please update again soon, abd keep up the fabulous work!

Hugs & Kisses

Katonie

Thank you the new chapter. I really liked the bear scene it made me laugh.

Thievery?! YOU are the one posting your work (apparently not so "freely") on the INTERNET. When I go to an art gallery and admire a painting then walk out without buying it, does that make me a theif? I browse this adult site as a voyeur and I'm thankful that there are so many lovely exhibitionists, such as yourself, that are compelled by whatever "madness" motivates you to share your dirty, albeit well crafted, thoughts with the rest of the world wide web. However, a literary critic I am not. It's hard to enjoy a story when you're afraid of getting b*tch-slapped at the end of each chapter.

I enjoy your sh*t, but damn!