rate_review Reviews

*sigh* I thought I finally found a mpreg-kai fic. But it turns out that tyson turns into a girl and carries the children, so how the hell can it be yaoi?

I like the general idea of this story, but it's very rushed and hard to understand at some points. As well, some of the grammatical errors are distracting. For instance, the word 'mayonnaise'. ((That's difficult to spell, I admit, but spellcheck is useful.))
I don't mean to be overly critical, and the general idea is good, but it needs quite a bit of work.