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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sweet story. Great potential. I think you should continue just because it is Gohan and Piccolo and how many stories are there of them? like almost none compared to Goku and Vegeta...so onwards with the fluff and smut. :)
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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great! little bumpy in the first paragraph, but after that the writing started flowing. And hey, I hope you continue this, I want to know how their relationship develops.
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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please make another one! That was incredible!!!!
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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Excellent! I think you've captured Picollo beautifully.