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:) I am so glad the babies are home! I feel really bad that they've been turned into such odd little things with such advanced intelligence. It must be so painful for Roy and Ed to see their children modified like this. ;_; The childrens' sweet innocence and naivete is gone. It's rather disturbing to see one year old children talking the way these two are. They talk better than a lot of adults! :( Is that what Ed is working on in the basement? a way to undo what was done to the kids? It has to be killing him to see his children acting like this. Can the kids walk as well as they can talk? I guess they could since Nathan can snap his fingers so well and Rayne has quite a bit of control over her hands too. *sigh* What was Hakuro planning on gaining from messing these kids up like this? doomsday alchemists? alchemists so powerful they could annihilate whole cities with a single transmutation? ugh. I am SO glad Hakuro is dead!! I hope Ed succeeds in changing the kids back into normal children. :)

Can I ask you something? I've been wondering about this for quite a while now so I'm just gonna come right out and ask point blank. Why are you posting your chapters in such a crazy way? For example, today you posted chapter 8 but you also added a bunch to chapter 7. Why? Why didn't you post chapter 7 in its entirety when it was originally posted? Why are you making your readers go back and reread the previous chapter? People don't expect to or want to have to do that. It's very confusing when you go to read the new chapter but you have no idea what's going on because the new chapter picks up from new stuff added to a previous chapter and you didn't know you had to go back and reread the previous chapter because the author didn't tell you you needed to do that! There has to be more people than me who have been left confused by this oddity. Maybe someone else has already pointed this out to you and if so I hope they explained it better than I did. I was just wondering if I was the only one who didn't have a clue what was going on and why this was being done. I hope this hasn't cost you some of your readers! Maybe from now on if you would post chapters in their entirety when you do post them it won't bewilder your readers.
Thank you taking the time to listen to me rant! :D
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Koneko =^.^=

O_O! Thank Heaven Ed is free and Hakuro is dead! :) He SO deserved that. He was freakin' crazy! I don't know what Ed was thinking going out in public like that, especially with his red coat on. Could he have made himself a bigger target? jeez. I'm anxious to see what's in the basement! Somebody's gotta find those babies! I'm really worried about them. Given how crazy Hakuro was, anything could have happened to them by now! ;_;
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Koneko =^.^=

WOW! So glad you're back! So much is going on with the story now! What is Hakuro planning to do with Ed? Is he trying to figure out how Ed managed to have children? Is that why he keeps sending him to the lab? Why is Hakuro raping Ed? to get him pregnant again? to break his spirit? both? What is going to happen to the babies? Oh I hope Tucker won't turn them into chimeras! *cries* I hope Roy rescues them soon!!! :)
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Koneko =^.^=

Ay que cute! Fluffy fics are awesome! I'm glad you finally updated! This fic is really good! I love babies!

Aw how sweet! Ed had a boy and a girl! :D Roy and Ed are so adorable together! I hope you get a chance to write more soon!
Koneko =^.^=

DUDE!!! I sooooo kept forgeting to review! OMG! Im sorry! Anyways loved the update!!!

Tell him Ed! I love Ed! He's so passionate! thanks for the update!

*grumbles* Ed should have been aloud to do more damage to that bastard!!!! But i do like the chapter...now you have to write chapter 5....*cracks whip* get to it!! lol jk jk

*grimaces* Well, it coulda been worse. Being stripped of his title isn't too bad all things considered. Ed's kinda lucky actually. Now he never has to worry about doing the military's (aka Hakuro's) bidding ever again! That's a very good thing! :) I did like that Ed punched out Hakuro! YAY! He had it coming anyway. :) I was impressed that Ed could move "with the grace of a cat" inspite of his pregnancy! Being with child obviously hasn't slowed him down any! :D Roy and Ed can raise their family in peace now. You are planning on at least mentioning the baby/babies some time soon aren't you? This is supposed to be an mpreg but the baby/babies has/have been unmentioned so far except for that one reference in chapter 2. just curious.
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Koneko =^.^=

Hi! I just reread the whole thing (all 3 chapters of it! LOL!) and a few things caught my eye. 1 - Maes is already dead in chapter 1 but alive in chapter 3. How much time difference is there between Roy getting shot and Maes assuming command and Ed getting shot and leaving the battlefield? Roy seemed quite accepting of the ghostly Maes so he had to have known Maes was dead for some time. There can't have been too much time difference if Ed is still serving in the military inspite of being pregnant but not showing yet. Or maybe he's starting to so he had to get the hell out of there before it got really noticible. hmm. Hakuro would have a fit if he knew Ed was pregnant. I guess that's one more reason why Ed fled the way he did. 2 - Ed put himself and his children in incredible danger by almost bleeding to death to get home AND collapsing on the front porch when he got there! He could have miscarried them if he had fallen wrong! Not to mention bleeding so much he passed out! He even left the front lines without getting the bullet removed! What was he thinking?!? His wound could have gotten horribly infected putting himself and the babies at terrible risk! *heavy sigh* Gotta love him inspite of his faults I suppose! :) 3 - You said Ed was a teenager in chapter 1 but that he was 21 in chapter 3. ?O_o? You might wanna tweak chapter 1 a bit.
I can't think of anything else and am eager to read more so...
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Koneko =^.^=