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nice. i really like it! please update soon! great chapter!

Fantastic!

I love it the lemon scene was so hot. I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.

wow they sure don't waste time

Great chapter. Could you describe Vegeta's house more as I'm wondering what it looks like?

Ok so far im liking what I see. U may want to put a mark to show ur jumping from one place to another, cause i got lost for a sec once or twice. And can I juat say AAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!! KAWIIIIIIIIII!!!!!!!!!!!! I love how vageta is with gohan! Its to much! I hope to see u updating this story soon!

Your story definitely has potential and it would be even better if you had it beta-read.
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Fantastic chapter!!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

I was a little concerned when you mentioned there would be two types of POV for this story, first person for Vegeta, and third person for Goku and Gohan.

You pulled it off nicely though. *thumbs up*

This chapter is an excellent start to the story. It got all the necessary things set up, without giving poor details on what the characters were feeling/thinking, and what their motives were for moving away from their cannon women. I'll be looking forward to seeing how it developes.

I hope I am not sticking my foot in my mouth when I suggest the need for a beta. They would find small errors for things such as then/than and wonder/wander.