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hm, a pregnancy.. mpreg seems to be the big trend these days ^^ I just hope this one's not going to be quiet as dark as Mortifer Lascivio's - I'm not sure I could handle two such intense angst-ladden stories at once!

Narahgarahna!!!

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Yeah I don't know what that means either. But Gah what the hell? Poor Goku! He lost a baby and he just found out?? That would make everything ten times worse. I feel so sad for him, I'm sure that i felt a few prickling tears when he said he'd just realized what those morning sicknesses were. *wipes away tears frantically* I'm not crying...over a story...I'm not...

Vegeta is being very supportive :D I thought he'd be a little more...demanding. "What the hell do you mean pregnant? Look I don't care what those crazy lunatics did to you, you're still keeping this baby!" Lol but then that would make him a selfish bastard and I'd have to kill him with a spoon.

Poor Goku had to get all that blood taken, I hate that! >.> When I had large amounts of blood taken, they gave me this nasty orange soda crap cept it was ten times sweeter than soda, so it was gross rather than good. Bubbly and warm too BRAK. Cookies and orange juice would have been heaven.

Also, I hope you don't mind but I just have to point this out. I've seen the same mistakes a few times but now I gotta say something: commas go after dialogue when followed by direct speech.

Example:

"I don't know," he said.

I noticed you used periods, and that's not grammatically correct. Also, I'm pretty sure "its'" is not a word. I do believe you're looking for the plain old simple "its" which is used for when something belongs to something. "Its fur is very shiny."

Ahhh, there I got that off my chest. I'm a grammar freak, I'll admit it. I used to beta for people and my eyes always immediately zip towards the mistakes, big or small. Red warning lights always go off in my head and it really distracts from the story Lol!

Anyway, awesome chapter. I so look forward to this story all the time. I was thinking about it when sleeping earlier. I was like, it's monday, it's monday, I hope she updates soon.

AHAHAHA.

Aheam

Love always,

Tabz

"The prince huffed and looked insulted as he folded his arms over his chest. “Kakarotto practically raped me. I had no choice but to cooperate or risk a mauling.”"

Oh Vegeta, you smooth operator. XD

Poor panicked Goku; this isn't going to be easy for him at all; I can only imagine what'll happen once his belly starts to show. O_O

Really enjoying the fic; can't wait for more. :3

Awww! I can't help but feel so sorry for Goku! That scene in the bathroom, with the throwing up and the watery eyes...almost made MY eyes water!

But the line where Vegeta accuses Goku of rape.. XD! I can only imagine how distraught that shriek Goku let out was! Oh man..I laugh every time I think about it.

This chapter was such a pleasant surprise, though! I mean, I know it's Monday but I was expecting it since you updated yesterday. :D Nevertheless; YAY!

I'm so excited to read the rest! I love Mpreg!Goku sooooo much! :3 .... ..... 'Cept this is the first story I've read where, again, I've felt so sorry for Goku in this situation. D: I kind of like it, though.... it's a relief to read something different.

I enjoy how happy Vegeta is about it, though. XD Usually he's the one to be all pissed off about the baby while Goku is the one trying to assure him it's going to be wonderful--but again, this is a nice new turn-around on it all.

WHEE! ... If it wasn't midnight and I didn't have to get up early tomorrow, I would totally start drawing some doodles right now...:<

Oh, and by the way, since I never got around to reviewing the other chapters, I'll tell you now that they were FABULOUS. Especially 42. And I'm happy that you didn't take Rai's advice because I really liked the little part where Vegeta mentioned Bulma. It was hilarious...so like you to add a little snippet of humor in even the most passionate scenes. XP But you also had a terrific point about how Vegeta has no sense of romance.

Yes, yes! UPDATE SOON! :D Maybe you can try for...:O THREE CHAPTERS IN A ROW! .... :Djustmaybe. >_>

Hmmm, I knew Goku was going to get pregnant. There was no way of avoiding that one. I AM really curious to find out why Goku's so nervous about having a child. I suppose after being imprisoned by Dr. Villa all those years as a lab rat, he'd be sensitive about being pregnant, especially since externally, he's a male. He might be nervous of someone like Dr. Villa finding out and capturing him. He also might not want to have more children, especially considering the fact that he has two grown sons. Anyway, as always, I look forward to the next update and thanks for writing two chapters in two days. It really made my evening!

*laughs* between you and Mortifer I need never have to worry about getting my daily angst-shot.

WOW 2 chapter in two days?!!? You ROCK!!!
This chapter was pure awesomeness!! As for that lemon *_* LOVED it. lol I actually read it twice XP. And YAY Goku's finnaly pregies!! gotta love 'im ^_^
¬_¬ i wonder how a pregnant Goku behaves...:D well i can't wait to find out!!
XX Keep up the awesomeness XX

Awwwwr. What a wonderful lemon. So passionate.. just perfect. But I reckon "the morning after" will not be very pleasant...

Very well written. That lemon was quite good save for that line about Bulma. It was utterly unnecessary, when an ex lover is mentioned in the middle of a steamy scene it ruins the mood and throws you off. Of course it is your story and you are the one and only entitled to rightfully take the decisions you see fit, but if you allow a little advice, since that was irrelevant to the plot you might consider to change it or at least to take it into account next time, because those little details can affect to the overall factor of enjoyment. That said, the plot is really captivating and the story is developing very nicely.

AHHH I KNEW IT WASN'T GOING TO BE A GOOD THING. Poor Goku, I feel for him so much right now. I blame this all on Vegeta just because I can. That bastard, doing this to Goku *shakes fist* and then blaming it all on him. Rape indeed.

But I am glad my story was able to inspire you to write. I'm so glad that you did because this chapter was really awesome! I liked the beginning the way Goku was reacting to the idea that he could possibly be pregnant. I mean, it was actually really in character. Seems like him to sort of ignore the situation with a smile and nonchalant replies.

Poor baby, morning sickness sucks. It seems between me and you, he's doomed to a lifetime of it. Hahahaha. I see you used the blood idea too, that was weird how we both thought of that ^^ Just rub it in mah face why don't you. Well, mine WAS a little different but same concept.

I see you rather foreshadowed some dark events that may occur later. I don't like this. Don't tell me Goku is going to lose a baby in TWO fics Lol.

Ahhh, I love this story. I wish there was more but I'm very pleased you updated so quickly. This shall keep me satisfied enough until later. You're really great!

Love always,

Talitha.