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Hot as hell.

Its about time we got some real lemon!!!


D:

Yes! A very hot chapter, and one that was worth the wait for. I'm glad you didn't rush things, because it makes the moment so much sweeter. As for Goku being OOC, in the circumstances you are portraying him, I don't think he is at all. I think that Goku would react strongly to being so much weaker than he was before, especially considering his current size differential. He's used to being the protector of everybody, and now he's the one that needs the protection. I definitely think it would be something difficult for him to get used to. But Vegeta's there to help him out and I think the Goku you are creating will be so much more dynamic than the way he was before he left with the Dragon. I feel that you are doing an excellent job, and that your characters fit the molds you have created for them perfectly.

That was incredible. *¬* VERY nicely done.

Everything you described.. from the way they started making out against the wall, to how the clothes gradually came off and the mirror scene...it all flowed perfectly all the way to the end! X3

I'm really looking forward to what happens next. They're bonded: what now? Hehe.

Unfortunately, even if I wanted to draw doodles for this chapter, I couldn't post them on DA, obviously. :D But on April 26th, my ban from Y1gallery SHOULD be over with and I'll be able to post lots of good stuff on that website! ^^

... I have to read this again. XD CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT UPDATE!!

Well I'm glad Bulma was able to explain things out; Vegeta jumps to conclusions way too quickly. XD
Poor Goku though, I hope he'll feel better, though I don't know how he's going to react to Vegeta once he wakes up. O_O

Chapter 25
Aw- Hell no!
I don't want Vegeta ta' separate from Goku.
that probably isn't whats going ta happen but n' any
case it is makin' me nervous.
fantastic story girl- don't stop goin' it's got
me to hooked to have it stop.

‘third class science experiment’

‘a date with his toothbrush’

I adore your word choice in these two moments.

The Story is going well so far. I think the only thing that bothers me is that Goku is a little more out of character than I would have liked. Over all, I am enjoying where the story is going. The idea is original and fresh. Keep up the good work.

Oh 2 new chapters, wonderful.

Really like the explanation that Bulma came up with, made a lot of sense.

Vegeta's temper finally got the better of him, he was doing so well, but I guess the sense of betrayal was too much for him to to control. How can he think of letting Goku go though, after the conversation with Bulma, doesn't he realise how much pain that would cause him especially in his weakened state.

Poor Goku, hasn't he suffered enough *snuggles Goku*. All he needs is his prince.

Thank you so much for posting that second chapter. I was personally reaaaalllllyy hoping that you would do what you did last week and keep going after I read 24 before I had dinner. XD And you did! Love you, love you, love you~~

Goku's poor little heart! D: I literally lurched when I read that scene. It really caught me off guard, although, considering everything he'd been through, it made sense.

I can't believe their partly bonded--and that Vegeta's going to try to break that bond! O_O He's going to kill Goku! Ever since he came back from Villa's lab, Goku's been spiritually leashed to the man. If they're not lovers, I see Goku looking up to Vegeta as a big brother, maybe even father--the role of his protector and guardian, ya know? Vegeta can't let him go!

You always manage to sneak at least one line that makes me burst out into laughter when I read it and this time it was the line about Vegeta's 'Emotional Retardation'. XD Amazing!

I don't know if I'll have any doodles for this part just because I have some other drawings I'm working on right now butttt...don't put it past me, I may get a couple scribbles down if I really have to. >>; I have Goku's heart attack scene replaying in my head over and over...it wants to be drawn..but we'll see.

Keep updating! I want more story! More, more, more, more! -:: Bounces up and down like a little girl listening to her bedtime fairytale. ::-

Oh no! What did you do?!
Poor Saiyans ... *sniff* ... having to suffer so much because of a cruel author ... *sniff* ...
The last chapters it really looked like they would be happy now, but nooooo ... quite frustrating, I can tell you.
Well, keeps up the tension (is this the rigth word to use) ... whatever, what I wanted to express is that every week I'm looking forward to tuesday morning - first thing I do at work is check at aff.net to read your new chapter *g* ... evil me *g*

Well, I hope you don't let our babies suffer for too much longer ... and ... most important point of all: When will there be sex?!!

Oh, I know I'm rotten to the core. *gg*