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NOOO!! Please update this fic! It can't just end there! I beg you! Please don't give up on this fic. They jsut met and everything! *puppy dog face* :( *hugs, blood, and chocolate*

i curse u cliff hanger 2 the deepest pits of hell. update soon b4 i decide 2 sick my rapid goku-oozaru on ur ass.

come on now why are you playing finish the story why did u stop at the most interesting part this is good u need to keep it up......

Hmm, I bet German is your first language, eh? The general lack of commas and occasional capitalization of random nouns is a clue. :) Good work so far, but get yourself a beta or two and it will read much more smoothly.

love the story. please write more soon.

Hoy!!! That was very scary with the discreption of the goul... yuck *towards his death*...
Is goku a reincarnation of the person that vejita once knew or did goku once met him in his much younger self?

I really am sooo glad that you have continued this story!! Thank you so much!!

Oooh that disgusting ghoul almost got him, why did 17 leave him like that. Tut-tut Vegeta won't be happy with him but at least he got to rescue Goku. What's happened to him now though and why did he say Vegeta's name, is something coming back to him?

Love the mystery in this story and the dark creepiness :)

I'm not as adversed to complete AUs as I once was or I wouldn't have given this a try. It's fairly interesting, but you desperately need a beta. The spelling mistakes really distract from the reading. Also, don't rush things along too fast, it kind of breaks the scene. Lastly, Vejita is a head taller than Goku? Okay, I know this is an AU.. but shouldn't there be, you know, at least some resemblance to the actual characters? Why bother writing DBZ when really it's an original with DBZ-names? I'll wait for the next two chapters or so before deciding wether this is worth continuing to read.

I love this story. It has alot of potential for an enldess plot twister. Are you going to update it soon? I cant wait!!