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January 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So far the story is pretty good and I can't wait for you to update. I also noticed several spelling and grammatical errors and was wondering if you were interested in a beta I've never beta-ed before but am more than willing to try if you'll let me. If you are interested, just send me an email. my address is smhatche@coastal.edu. I'm looking forward to the rest of your story!
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January 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well this is interesting! I don't normally like AU fics, but this is pretty entertaining ^.^ Nicely thought out and put together! I can't wait to read the next chapter!
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
evil. ahhhhhh. new chapter soon please!
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Gripping cliffhanger. Is the ghoulie going to get Goku and is it a distant relative? Glad to see Raditz will make an appearance, but when will Goku meet the master?
The suspense is killing me.
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The suspense is killing me.
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January 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is really intersting! Though, you might want to check over your work a little. There were some typos and word repeats. That's all. Anyways! I really enjoyed it. Hope to see an update soon!
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January 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
the only thing i see wrong with this beautiful first chapter is that i now want and crave more. if you update soon i'll love you forever.
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a really good start thank for sharing it.
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January 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fan ^-^
J-chan
J-chan
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January 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh a creepy story, wonderful. Great start and what a cryptic end of chapter. If this is you first DBZ story I must congratulate you as it's shaping up really well.
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