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WOW! Usually it's the other way around. But I think I could get use to the new Go..Kakarotto.

Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!

Wow...impressive. I did not see their trip into space at all. This should give some pretty good twists and turns. There's no way Vegeta can escape crazy Goku now.

At times, it seemed that Vegeta couldn't make up his mind about this new Kakarotto. His confusion was obvious. And the whole time I kept thinking about the first time we ever see Vegeta in the show and how he was the one who asked Goku to join him. The tables have turned indeed.

I really think this fanfic is going to be awesome. I check for updates daily, haha. If there's anything I would like to see the most while reading, is maybe more emotion from Vegeta. Sometimes he seems pretty accepting to Kakarotto's evil ways, and then the next sentence he's absolutely against everything he says. It's like he can't make up his mind either way.

But anyway. I am so excited for this story to continue. I love angst...so...so much and I can see some dark things happening in the future. Awesome stuff!

Very nice! Thank you for reformatting!

Wow...Amazing. AMAZING! I...haven't gotten so into a fanfiction like this in a long time. There is just so much I enjoyed while reading this story.

It's rare when we actually get such a descriptive and accurate view inside Vegeta's mind while he looks at Goku. I absolutely loved the details and observations Vegeta had on Goku and how he is so powerful. I read it how Toriyama probably would have described it. Vegeta's fear toward Goku's power, his realization on Goku's pure heart. It was all greatly written.

And the whole thing with Vegeta saying "Goku." I could actually feel Vegeta's pride crumbling. It's as if his saying Goku's true earth name...pretty much killed off Goku's connection to the saiyajin race. How alone Vegeta must feel. Just by saying Goku's name it's as if Vegeta truly is the last full-blooded saiyajin.

And Goku's reaction! So much emotion and mystery! Ah, this story will keep me thinking...and I love it. So awesome. Great stuff!

Despite the paragraphing problems, which I suspect are aff.net's fault mostly, this story seems to have potential. I certainly like where it is going so far. There isn't any ooc and your grammar and spelling are good. ^_^ Please continue.

Very promising start. They are very much in character so far and I like the way you have Vegeta thinking about Goku's humanity being his source of power. It will be interesting to see how you have Vegeta progress this and whether he can adapt to making it a strength of his.

My only criticism is that I hope you can space out the paragraphs more to make it easier to read.
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Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!

This has the makings of a great story so far, although the spacing between paragraphs is a bit strange. But it wasn't hard to follow and I'm looking forward to read more. Goku and Vegeta are both very in character and I'm curious to see what develops between the two mighty Saiya-jin warriors.

Excellent start ^.^ Your writing skills are great and the story flows nicely. I eagerly await the next chapter.