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Yes I definitely like this story. I really want to know how you can slip so easily into the minds of these characters and I also agree, Dillon is definitely a character to be proud of. I really am looking forward to an update, so I hope you update soon!

Zx

This is a heartbreaking story, but i can't bring myself to give up on reading it. Goten's right, we do like to hear and see all the gruesome stuff that happens to others. I like the fact that Goten finds it hot whenever Dillion kills someone because there's that side of him that enjoys that just as much if not more. I also like how they're both beings of uncomprehensible power and they do the most sinful things a human being can do and it turns them on. Probably because I try and write my stories the same way >.> but yours is different. They both except that in each other and they've fallen in love with who they actually are and it pokes my heart in a certain way where...i think it's touching? >.> I'm weird. O.o

To be honest, I thought Vegeta was going to actually be useful and help the kid, but nope he's too busy fucking his dad. No matter how bad Goten gets, I can't help but have this hope in my heart that someone will save Goten. I thought that someone would be Dillion, but that idiot's just making it worse. But then there's Gohan, even though he has his own dark secret (don't we all), I know he'll do anything to help his little brother. Who knows, maybe the genius will make a difference some how, but like they said, this story is unpredictable.

It sounds to me that Goten is becoming more in touch with his saiyan side than just craziness >.> but that's just how I see it now. Poor kid. At the beginning of the story, I just wanted Trunks to be gone and have Goten's pain ease a bit...man why's he still alive? When's Goten going to finally say the word and end his miserable existence? Or better yet...do it himself? With the way the story's been going, I'm actually surprised that Goten can still make sense. I mean, I thought Goten was no more and all that was left were his voices.

Ok, I have a few things to say about Dillion, even though this maybe so painfully obvious to you, but hey, i got to say it out loud. If Dillion truly loved Goten, he would've put him out of his misery when he had the opportunity...he still does, but he's practically just as crazy to give anyone any sense of relief. What was i thinking? Dillion being good for him...Goten would probably be better off with Trunks. Little fruit. I keep waiting for someone to finally stand up to that Italian hunk...geez Gohan still hits the top of my list. Who else? But something tells me that he won't be any help at all. >.> Man, i can't believe Voorheese (love the nickname by the way ;)) still has a purpose in this story. I keep waiting for Goten to finally kill him because he keeps screwing up. He's so reckless. Then again, I absolutely love it when he and Gohan...oh, I mean, Mr. Gohan, *giggles* have hot, crazy sex. X) Sorry I LOVE Gohan. Nothing can compare to his sexiness. X) Anyways, with a little twinge of hopeless hope, i hope this has a happy ending...then there would be a sequel, maybe X) ...but then again, this story wouldn't seem very fitting unless the main character dies in the end. >_> That's my sick and twisted opinion, but hey, i'm a fan. :)

Wow this is the longest review I've ever written >.> I'll quit rambling and wait agonizingly for the next chapter. X)

That was an amazing chapter. It was inevitable that Goten was going to snap eventually and it was chillingly terrifying when he did. I think I was holding my breath as I read that bit - it was so graphic and uncompromising, exactly as it should be.

In her face!!
I'm sad that Goten has snapped as he has, but glad that she is finaly gone!!
Great chap, the threesome was HOT!!!!!

I like your approach to storytelling here - it's as though you've taken hold of us and said, "Right, we're going this way now" and then dragged us off on a completely wild ride, where it's impossible to anticipate the twists and turns. I love a story that's not predictable and where the author isn't afraid to take risks - and that's definitely what you have here. Although, the incredible hotness of this latest chapter mustn't be overlooked. And it was sizzling hot. Interesting that Goten is enjoying the way Dillon is dominating him in every way. It makes me wonder what the outcome of this will be and if those inner voices of his will let this continue for much longer.

OMG!!!! *Major nosebleed alert, blood transfusion needed emmidiatly*
Very very hot chapter XDXD So glad that Goten fanaly could get some happynes in his life, he deserves it :D

It's sad that these things happen in real life. Life is such a bitch with closed minded, idiotic, asshole people in it. We are who we are on the inside, don't judge by looking at the outside.

Sometimes I really dislike people...but unfortuniately they are always around...

I would love to read more of this fic....;o)

DAmn i just gets worse ... Thanks for the great update.. i really like the way you describe things :D

Is it just me or are things getting worse... Great chapter :D