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April 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It reads fine - it's not difficult to understand.
It' quite a melancholy little piece. It's quite lovely, in a sad little way.
You could stand to develop it a little more though. It just seems a little short and fast paced.
It' quite a melancholy little piece. It's quite lovely, in a sad little way.
You could stand to develop it a little more though. It just seems a little short and fast paced.
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March 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Here goes my second attempt to review....not sure why things are not posting....I think this is a good short story and you wrote it well. We do love our angst and unrequited love. Poor Havoc....