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June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.
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June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Can't wait for the next chapter with Dende X Gohan.
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June 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting first chapter,I am looking forward reading more :3 you write well !!!
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June 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Still captivated! Amazing chapter even better than the first; I love the triangle involving Piccolo, Gohan and Dende. Not a lot of authors use Dende so I am glad that he comes into play. I feel sorry for Gohan because Piccolo seem to have made up his mind...or did he? The Gotenks sex scene was epic and I am looking forward to more great smut in the next chapter. Thanks for the update!
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June 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*squeals with laughter* OH, the conversation between Vegeta and Goku was priceless!! Poor Goku! He just didn't have a clue ^.^
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June 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG this looks so promising!!!
please update soon!
poor goku, and even tho i hate chichi, that sucks for her...
why can't trunks and goten be together? parents?
what does goku want to ask vegeta about?
who is android 10?
and PICCOLO is JEALOUS! HA!
please update soon!
poor goku, and even tho i hate chichi, that sucks for her...
why can't trunks and goten be together? parents?
what does goku want to ask vegeta about?
who is android 10?
and PICCOLO is JEALOUS! HA!
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June 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful start. So many threads to follow.
Android 17 releasing Android 10, will 17 be ok as he seemed drained?
Dende lusting after Gohan, now in with a chance as he and Videl have separated. But as Piccolo was trying to put him off, will he make a play for Gohan instead?
Chichi getting old and possibly ill. Goku not really coming to terms with that and only thinking about the underwire contraption to aid him in battle :-) I can't wait until that conversation with Vegeta!
Poor Trunks and Goten having to hide their love from the others. Did I sense Trunks was more concerned about others finding out than Goten?
Really looking forward to the next chapter.
Android 17 releasing Android 10, will 17 be ok as he seemed drained?
Dende lusting after Gohan, now in with a chance as he and Videl have separated. But as Piccolo was trying to put him off, will he make a play for Gohan instead?
Chichi getting old and possibly ill. Goku not really coming to terms with that and only thinking about the underwire contraption to aid him in battle :-) I can't wait until that conversation with Vegeta!
Poor Trunks and Goten having to hide their love from the others. Did I sense Trunks was more concerned about others finding out than Goten?
Really looking forward to the next chapter.
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June 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm hooked. I liked the underwire as a "secret weapon".
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This is intense. And intensely interesting. You hit on a lot of very valid, very under appreciated details. I love that. I will definitely be watching to see how this progresses. :)
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic! Your writing style and imagery has easily won over sensations. I COMPEL you to make another chapter to this story which I think will be a success. Please UPDATE as soon as possible please!