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Gotta love that pairing!

I always imagined Vegeto would be more powerful than Gogeta due to the permantant fusing, but you are right that with SS4 and the tail Gogeta would be, plus, he was later on in the series and both Goku and Vegeta had gained more power by then.

Any chance of a sequel as this was really hot.

this was very cool. Great job i love it

Um, the idea was good in theory but I think the execution could use a little work. For one, you have a lot of grammar and spelling problems, not to mention the fact that you don't write dialogue correctly. A few times I got the feeling that this story was actually a joke, just purely from the way it was written. Though I'm still not entirely sure about that.

Also, try to avoid huge block paragraphs, they are extremely hard to follow. Try separating them into two or three paragraphs and always start a new paragraph when new dialogue appears. It just makes the story easier to follow.

Not bad for a first try though. This pairing is definitely interesting, even though I don't know how the two of them can appear at the same time since they are just different fusions of two of the same people.

I give this story two and a half, three stars maybe.