rate_review Reviews

I was glad to see this story was updated :) It's suspenseful and has a lot of good action. My only complaints are that the pacing is really fast and the typos can be distracting. There is a lot of potential here. I'd love to see things fleshed out more and cleaned up a bit.

Goku was smart to go to Seventeen's house, but I just hope it's the good Seventeen and not the bad one. It seems to me that the androids might have gone after the good Seventeen first on account of his ability to spoil their plan. Also, how did they manage to kill Gohan? And why not kidnap him? Also, where are Goten and little Trunks?

I liked how you described the androids from the future as being obsessed with Mirai. Well...he *is* beautiful. I suppose I'd be willing to kill a few people to be with him, too ;-P But I hope that Mirai gets his revenge on them. I would like to see him (as opposed to Goku or Vegeta) make them pay for what they've done to him. Though a little bit of bondage play might be fun first ;-)

I feel soooo bad for Mirai. As if he didn't have *enough* reasons to need prozac as it was... :-P Now he thinks Goku used him and if he knew the truth, he'd probably be even MORE upset.....

*tear*

Oh no, poor Mirai :-\ I hope he realizes what's happening before it's too late. Before 17 can get that damned collar back on him...

This story really made an impression when I read it a few months ago, so I'm back now to comment :) Hope to see another chapter soon!