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June 3, 2019 at 12:00 AM
This was a great story! I really enjoyed how you wrote the story out. I enjoyed the descriptions and everything else that was in the story.
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December 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I liked this story a lot. My only complaint is that Winry and Shezka kissing and having sex is.
Also, small plot hole: Ed, Al, and Winry don't know of Hughes' death for a while. Days have pasted since his funeral when they left by train, and Shezka was at his funeral. But I didn't think until just now that you may have retconned the anime a little bit, which is perfectly fine.
Overall, good stuff, and a nice yuri. You inspire me to write a story with this pairing as well. :-)
Also, small plot hole: Ed, Al, and Winry don't know of Hughes' death for a while. Days have pasted since his funeral when they left by train, and Shezka was at his funeral. But I didn't think until just now that you may have retconned the anime a little bit, which is perfectly fine.
Overall, good stuff, and a nice yuri. You inspire me to write a story with this pairing as well. :-)