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awwwwwwww how sweet ^^ I love it!!!

Absolutely wonderful! So Poetic! Please continue to write, because your writing is an example for all of us.

-Gen

I do hope there is sequel. This is such a beautiful yet angst story . I hate to see VG been separated like this

HEHEHEHEHE...... i didn't notice, but the previous review (the one that's signed JIM) is also mine... there you go... 3 reviews from the same person, and no reply n_nU (kind of sad... but hey i can't help but come back here and read this story again!)

bueno, jaja dime... tienes muchos lectores de habla hispana?? incluso habia pensado pedirte ayuda y asesoria con mi fic... "THE CHAINED HEIR" es bastante mediocre la vdd... pk no manejo muy bien la escritura inglesa.... ya pase el TOEFL y eso pero tu simplemente escribes mas bonito... lo cual es chiaroscuroish pk mientras TU me inspiraste ps no se si valga la pena seguir escribiendo... pensaba solicitarte tu valioso punto d vista y si gustas hasta ser mi BETA READER pro veo k tus propios fics (a pesar de ser extremadamente elaborados, aderezados y hermosos) toman mucho tiempo para actualizarse... supongo que eres una persona muy ocupada... ademas de que escribir ASI debe ser mas tardado que escribir COMO YO jajaja soy un mucho muy simpletona jejejeje... bueno... de cualquier forma suerte con tus fics!!! (no k la necesites x_0) ESPERO PRONTO ACTUALICEs Y SOBRE TODO QUE LA VIDA TE SEA GRATA!!! x0x0x0x0x0x0x0x0x!!!!!!!!!!!! grax x todo... te quiere, JIM

I ALSO COMMENTED ON PAPER DEMON ABOUT THIS ONE BUT I JUST LOVE IT!

CAN'T HELP TO COME BACK AND READ IT AGAIN... I THINK I ALSO REVIEWED IN FF.NET (THE ONE THAT PLEADS 4 REVIEW) bueno, yo tmb soy d habla hispana y tengo un ficsillo en peiper dimon que creo ke no esta quedando del todo bien... estube buscandote en to2 tus ciber cuentas pro creo k hace mucho no actualizas... bueno, creo k playtime deberia ser actualizada antes k las otras n_nU (en una d tus cuentas preguntas eso... ) pero tienes un FIC LLAMADO lost innocence QUE ME LLAMO MUCHISIMO LA ATENCION Y ME ENCANTARIA VERLO ACTUALIZADO, solo lleva 1 capitulo segun yo y no esta en la mayoria d tus sitios pero... quisiera saber si ya abandonaste ese fic... que es lo mas seguro *llora desconsolada*

bueno, a pesar de ke el ingles no es tu lengua madre kiero decirte ke escribes cosas hermosas y deberias terminar to2 tus FICS!!!!! yay...

bueno, me retiro... y te dejo con un gran abrazo y agradecimiento x compartir con total strangers tu hermoso arte MUA!!!

x favor informame sobre ese fic (lo vi en peiper dimon)

loved it

I actually can't put into words how good that was...

You write so beautifully, your strong vocab just flowing together lyrically...
You really do write ever so well...
I believed every part of this story as if it were real, it seems like it's laced with genuine emotion.

Just wow, Tyrana....Wow.

This is so beautifully written, Tyrana, and I couldn’t stop reading till I reached the end, also I was so tiered when reading it late at night.

You have painted a very intense picture of Gokus and Vegetas relationship, so beautiful and painful at the same time. I really felt the pain myself, when they had to separate at the end of the day and Goku hoped for Vegeta to make him stay, to put there relationship for everyone to see and end the secrecy. I liked how Goku wished for Vegeta to totally open up for him, but still understand and respected that he did’t and how he sees Vegeta’s deep emotions and love in his eyes and gestures. And I liked the end, Goku’s realization, that all that matters is that they are together and to enjoy every moment of it.

You did great with Goku’s voice, it really felt like him speaking. Vegeta was also very in character and you showed how his past has modeled him. And I’m very impressed how you use the language to skilful and flowing and with such an extended vocabulary. I enjoyed your fic very much, Tyrana and I always love to read more from you.

Wooooow, Tyrana! *claps enthusiastically* That was utter perfection. The emotions were so real and the conflict in both Goku and Vegeta was so intense and heart-wrenching.

This was such a beautiful fic and I'm sure I'll read it again and again. Thank you for sharing!

I'd honestly love to say that this is a gorgeous story. There is so much in it that holds this...beauty to it...this passion. Each word flows with a hidden truth or emotion. There are words in here that I loved hearing, because they were so beautiful or different. That I've never seen anyone use before but have wanted to, so that is one of the many reasons why I loved this piece.

The detail is amazing, astonishing, perfect. There is so much of it in here but not too much. Some people put too much and it is boring, dull, loses its purity, but you, you do not do this. I compliment you for this fact and for finding such a delicate balance. There were some places where I almost felt as if I was going to start tearing up because of the beauty of the words as they flowed together and painted this wonderful picture in my mind.

There is such emotion within this story. I felt as if I were these characters, feeling these feelings and experiencing these experiences. My heart thudded in my chest as I scrolled down with my eyes glued to the screen and my mouth slightly ajar. I felt my stomach churn a little bit because I could FEEL the words. I was IN the story.

I enjoyed Vegeta and Goku's characters. They were flawless, their love was presented flawlessly. You did them well. I love that Goku did not feel any guilt for his love for Vegeta or for what he did. He wouldn't. At least I don't think he would. He would embrace his love and he would embrace his actions. He would never intentionally do anything wrong or hurt anyone, so you know his intentions were pure-hearted and good. That is why I loved that he did not regret what he did. It would break my heart if he felt regret for this.

The length of the story was perfect. Some people rush to get to the point, others take too long and never really get there. You did yours just wonderfully, with the perfect amount to keep me interested AND satisfied. Not many stories can do this for me, I will lose interest too fast. So the fact that I made it to the end is a huge testament to your wonderful skill itself.

I loved the ending too. It actually had me choke up just a little bit. It was so beautiful and good and just plain...perfect. I know I used that word a lot but I can't think of another way to describe this.

Please, never stop writing. Continue and grow and you'll only get better, even though you are already wonderful.

Love always,

Talitha.