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O.o This whole chapter of Gohan's life was a walking distaster. (You wrote it well, enough to make me want to hide from the drama of it all.)

I am glad Gohan walked away - as sexy as it would have been to see them together, Gohan was right in what he did at that moment.

Although I can't say Trunks' thoughts of what it would be like to have Gohan break over him like a tidal wave - um....now Trunks just looks at it like a challenge. Eek!

YEAH. GET 'IM, TRUNKS.

Seriously. Every time this story updates, I die of excitement, just a little.

This story is quite intrigueing, I like the fact of how they feel for each other
and how Goten wants to seperate. Very lovely, :D

Oh Trunks is on the rebound. This is great, can't wait to see how they get together ^_^ K

The cutest story! I love your charater development and each personality matches perfectly. I don't really know how to discuss the story... -__-...but I'll be happy with whatever you choose to do with the characters since it's your work. I really like it though. I'm glad I'm able to review now as well. Before I would have had to sign in and I don't have an account here. I look forward to the next chapter.

Wow... just my luck. I check this story TWO nights in a row, and got new chapters of a great story BOTH times. ABSOLUTELY loved Trunk's last line. Trunks really is egging Gohan on so much right now, and the fact that Gohan is possibly in denial about any possible feelings towards Trunks is hilarious. I loved his sputtering on about not being homophobic. That was absolutely priceless.

And thanks for clearing some of the things up in the review response. I understand that you want them to tent to their more civilized human natures a bit more. I read quite a bit, I guess I just forget about how they're really like on the show, compared to how they are usually portrayed by fan-based ideas. Thank you SO much for the offer to e-mail me when you update. That would be really appreciated. I really do wish AFF had a bit more of the features that it's kiddy counterpart seems to have. XD E-mail sent via yahoo IM Thank you so much for that.

It would be nice to know when you are posting again, thanks.

Back to your story... Hehe, too a point, I actually felt bad for Goten, I didn't really hate him any more, but I don't like him any less at this point. I thought he kind of deserved what he got for treating Trunks the way he did, but I would have hated to be stripped of my shoes like that as well. XD Gohan's getting a run for his money for playing the middle man at this point. I don't think I'd like to play referee for two demi-Saiyans in the middle of an ex-lovers qualler. Gohan's ribs might be stronger than the average humans' but he's taking Saiyan blows to them as well. Please don't over abuse the poor demis. XD

Plastic wrap on the doors... I laughed when Trunks found that... XD As far as Trunks, he seems to get a kick out of intentionally invading Gohan's personal space. I'm still not sure if he was using his own tooth brush or not... And that's a BIGGIE for me. I made my mother buy me a new one, when she accidentally used mine instead one time. XD So, between that and the scalp massage, I don't think I've ever seen Trunks portrayed as being the one so open to personal contact before. I think he's usually portrayed to be a bit stand-offish, seeing as that easily could be an inherited personality quirk growing up with Vegeta, but I'm loving the new spin that you've put into his character. It's easy to see how he relates to others in his own way, but it's grating on Gohan's nerves.

I'm looking forward to your next update, once again. Man, I must have reviewed REALLY late after the initial posting of your previous chapter, and for that I'm sorry... But I'll be looking out for your e-mail, and checking periodically once again.

I'm glad you enjoy my reviews. I like writing them for stories that truly deserve them, and it's great to see when an author appreciates them so much to respond to each individual ones as well.

~daisy

Other than the shoe confrontation (oi!) this was a very fun chapter to read. :)

Poor, poor Gohan....*follows them to the bedroom only to have the door shut in her face* Damn!

Beautifully written chapter. I'm in awe of your skills at the moment. And as far as feeling sad about Trunks more so than Goten, I'm sort of put out with Goten that he could be so callous at the time, and consider Trunks as nothing more than a "fuck buddy" as they so like to have called themselves. I'm surprised that there are so many reviewers who are feeling sad for Goten, when he's the one who seems to be fine.

I'm glad you liked the last review so much, I hope I can give this one justice compared to it.

Unrequited love tied to the physical aspects of a relationship like that is gut wrenching. I'm so glad that Gohan has been there supportively for Trunks. I know that Trunks hasn't really considered anything serious as a relation between them yet, but the subtle hints you so expertly insert are sweet tender moments between them. Like Gohan comforting Trunks when he was crying, and the younger man not wanting to ever move, that was just too endearing for them. I'm the Truhan fan moreso than any other couple, so I hope they notice the small things between them eventually.

Like the way Trunks' gaze tended to linger on Gohan in that suite, and the way that Gohan really did admit it to himself at least that Trunks is hot, that was another thing they have going for them, but right now their only ties to each other seem to be need for rebound and lust towards each other.

I'm not sure if Trunks finding out about what went wrong with Gohan and Videl's relationship would hurt too much either. Gohan still doesn't seem to know how deep the two boys were involved. As far as he knows, Trunks just kissed Goten on the balcony and saw Goten turn him down, but I'm surprised he hasn't really picked up the sent of them in the room or anything. I think by now he's realized there was a bit more to it than that, but I'm glad that Gohan isn't just siding with Goten, being that their brothers or anything.

I really hope this ends well for them, and thank you for the update. I'll be looking forward to your next installment as well. I'm really glad that Truhan is still being written, for all the Vg/Gk you see anymore. XP

~daisy

This is a wonderful piece of work! I usually only read Goku and Vegeta yaoi, but I love this! Please write more soon!

Amazing and entertaining work!

-Genave

Well…despite at the end of the chapter Gohan turning into a Cinderella and the entire shopping-thing reminding of a teenage dream of winning a million $ and just going shopping, the chapter was a win. I don’t see that grand problem that you have been talking about.

”“Would you give it a rest with that, Mom?” Goten cut in loudly, talking over his mother. “My formative years were just fine because I had Gohan and he was a better father than dad ever—.”
[…]They both heard the soft sounds of their father’s voice consoling Chichi and then a distinct click, after which there was just silence.
Gohan mentally thanked his dad. Then his thoughts turned back to his brother, the real reason he had called.”

Whoa, Goten is rather…harsh. Especially knowing that Goku is in the house. But that’s your average teenager probably. And at the same time Gohan seems to appreciate Goku. This scene let me see the structure of their family. Chichi is the same loud and usually annoying woman but Goku knows what buttons he needs to push to mold her.

They just didn’t talk about things like this. Even when Gohan had announced that he and Videl were separating, Goten only mumbled ‘If you ever need to talk . . . .” and Gohan had awkwardly thanked him but never took him up on the offer. Although they remained close as they’d gotten older, both of them had tacitly accepted the fact that they didn’t talk about girls, relationships, or sex. It was probably because of the age difference. And by the time Goten was old enough to care about sex, he’d started fooling around with Trunks and both boys had decided that it was better kept a secret.

I can’t tell you how much I like this paragraph! It touched a chord somewhere inside me. Really, very insightful.

“[…] he inspected himself in the mirror. He was happy with what he saw. The outfit: a classic. The body: well, flawless. The hair? He smoothed it with his hands then carefully placed his unruly bangs over his eyes. There. Perfect.
Nothing like looking damn sexy to lift one’s spirits. And if a certain ex-boyfriend should happen to notice, all the better.”

Really, all Trunks ^_^ A narcissist forever.

“Trunks had heard that when a Saiyan lost his tail, it took him awhile to learn how to get around again without it. He felt Goten’s absence like the loss of just such an appendage and was dizzy with the new perception."

Ah, what a nice comparison and the whole idea!

"“You look stressed, Gohan,” Trunks observed. “You know what you need?”
“An assistant?” Gohan suggested. “A vacation? A massage!”
“No.” Trunks rolled his eyes. “A new wardrobe! Just look at me. This morning I was a mess and now—.”
“You’re a mess in brand new clothes,” Gohan finished for him, shaking his head knowingly."

Your Gohan is a sharp lad, isn’t he? :D I like him! Usually he’s portrayed as cold as a fish but here he’s so cool ^_^

"“Do you know who would fucking cream her pants if she saw you right now?” Trunks asked, making Gohan even more uncomfortable. “Videl,” he finished matter-of-factly.
“Really, you think?” Gohan’s eyes snapped up from the floor where they had come to rest. The younger man noticed that apparently, even the immaculate Gohan could succumb to vanity where his ex was concerned. Maybe the two of them weren’t so different after all. “Ah, doesn’t matter . . .” he said, regaining his senses. “I can’t afford any of this.”"

Another nice touch of Gohan’s character. As said, I’m really glad that here he is familiar with human emotions and can be “peacockish” like the rest of us ^_^ But yeah, Trunks’ mouth is shooting fast, making even me feel like blushing.

"“Amazing you had time to fall for Goten when you seem so inexcusably infatuated with yourself.” […] But the younger boy didn’t respond, except to muse quietly, “What’s amazing is how he managed not to fall head over heels for me.”
Gohan wanted to protest at the unapologetic conceit of the statement. But he only snorted and turned to leave the dressing room. The kid had a damned point.”

Hahaha, Trunks is really priceless. Gohan is too, admitting that quite easily to himself ^_^