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OKAY I THROW IN THE WHITE TOWEL!!! I try to imagine how you would handle things; a calm and sweet morning after for the two lovebirds and you give me the mother of all drama!! I think you are going to carry that through to the next chapter BUT NOOOOO you give me calm, cool and collected. At first I was like, damn I want more fireworks, but oh no, I spoke too soon. WAY INTENSE!!!! I love how you have gotten the whole usual Vegta and Goku father roles reverced!! Most people put Vegeta emotionaly distant and only thinking about fighting, but he can relate to his son and give him the words he needs to hear most when he's been abdonened by the two people he held clostest to his heart. Yet Goku, usually understanding and loving, IS CLUELESS!!! I wanted to smack him and cheered when Goten finally got it through his dad's thick skull that he's been outcasted by training and fighting. But it fit so perfectly into the scenes you've taken from the show so its believeable and not completely OCC! I'm floored and I GIVE UP! YOU WIN! NO MORE TRYING TO THINK OF A BETTER PLOT!
I want Goten and Trunks back together they are my favorite pair ever. And you know the old saying "It takes a good friend to have a good fight." Well, it takes 'life-long lovers' and one brillant minded you to give us such an amazing story!!

PS please forgive all typos and rambling. . . I've been up for 2 days stright cramming for a test ;) But I couldnt go to sleep before surrendering.

I'm loving the interaction between Gohan and Trunks. I especially loved Trunks' realization about his childhood crush/hero worship of Gohan. Adds kind of an interesting twist to the relationship. Also, watching Gohan flounder at all of Trunks' double entendres is endlessly amusing.

This is definitely what I call an emotionally-charged chapter. While not action-oriented as the previous chapter, Chapter 14 is a gem because there are so many things that have been revealed and thrusted into the spotlight. I liked the way in which you revealed the depth of Trunks's vulnerability as a result of his breakup with Goten. The flashbacks helped to highlight those vulnerabilites. I also liked the way you juxtaposed Vegeta's soft side with Goku's insensitve side. It is always refreshing to see a not-so-perfect Goku.

Poor Gohan seems so conflicted with his feelings. I hope he decides to unlock those feelings in the box and just go for it :).

Once again, another great chapter, but I really didn't expect otherwise! Can't wait for the next chapter :).

Lol whaddafuuuuuuck. You made me tear up with the whole 'father son' thing with Trunks and Vegeta. D'awwwwww.

As for Goku... figures he would respond like that. #_#

Annnnnd Gohan... oh Gohan. Fufufufuu.

Yanno, I kinda feel retarded right now. Vegeta explained that Trunks loves Goten in this time because somehow Mirai loving Gohan was like... interdimensionally (ohgod I don't even know if that's a word or if I spelled it right FUCK YOU FIREFOX I WILL NOT FIX MY TYPOS) linked and it all connects together... e_e; It makes sense to me. :O Even though how I just explained it makes no sense, it makes sense. To me. Yes. That's what matters. That stuff makes sense to the reader. Mmmhmmm.

Now. Uhhh. I can't think or type properly cuz my a/c is currently freezing my bedroom. :'D

UHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHM. %___% Hm. I had something else witty and redundant to say... but oh well. I kinda wanna turn on an iron and run it all over my body. That's how cold I am right now.

Or maybe you can have a HOT STEAMY LOVE SCENE SOMETIME SOON, THAT OUGHTA WARM ME UP NICE AND GOOD LIKE.
8D

Yaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrr.
♥
Camui

So, chapter 12, eh? May I say holy shit? That was amazing. Everything about it was perfect. I need to go take a cold shower now.

You weave a most ensnaring web, my dear. This is my first foray into Gohan/Trunks, and thus far it's been a rewarding experience. I am utterly enthralled. Also, you've written everyone so convincingly and so truthfully that I can't decide how I want this to end. I'm pretty sure I'm rooting for Gohan and Trunks to end up together though. I like the way they compliment each other, with Gohan pulling Trunks into a more adult world, and Trunks leading Gohan into letting loose a little. I feel like Gohan will be crushed if it turns out the other way, but that he'll be the good boy, put on a smile and be happy for his brother. I really don't want that to happen. This story is amazing. I really can't wait for it to be updated.

I think towards the end made me sad considering the beginning was rather fluffy and not as awkward as I thought it would be. As for Goten I would feel sorry for him but I can't manage it XP probably because in some ways he brought this all upon himself even if that doesn't sound logical lol.
To be honest I think Trunks should just go for holiday....get away from the drama lmao but I know realistically he has to explain his actions to both Goten and Gohan.

Cynergy
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Well, this was quite the roller coaster.

I guess Gohan would consider the Lookout to be a good refuge. He's lucky he can go there and be welcome any time.

I noticed how Goku didn't answer Goten's direct question. Wonder if he ever will. At least Goten was able to tell Goku what he was thinking/how he felt.

The dream sequence in the tank was nice. Good way to get background information to the reader. :)

You're Bulma is IC. :P

Vegeta....interesting how he's analyzed and come up with this to say to Trunks. He has changed over the years.

Now to ponder what demi it is he's seeking.

Tender moment!!!! *cries* I never thought I'd see the day when a moment between Vegeta and Trunks would be written. I'm sure that it has been before, but I have never read one!! That it was in this story is just the whipped cream on my frappacino! Vegeta is a wonderful father. Part of me wants to laugh and giggle and another part wants to cry at the sentimentality of it. It's so wonderful. Once again, a great chapter. I love your style of writing. It's very fluid and smoothe. So enjoyable!! I can't wait to read the next chapter. And as much as I want Trunks and Goten to be friends again, I would like the relationship between Gohan and Trunks to develop more. They make such a cute couple. Could have something to do with the fact that I'm not much of a Goten fan. Maybe it has something to do with the fact that he does look so much like Goku, and I'm not much of a Goku fan. Vegeta all the way for me!!

Wow, this chapter had so many emotions going on it was
fantastic. Again the Father and Son deal with Trunks and Vegeta
is just too sweet. I really like how you portray Vegeta differently
around people, especially at this moment of time when his son needs him.

I also feel bad for Goten and Goku's relationship. Poor Goku can
be oblivious at times, and I like the fact that you make him aware
but yet not able to say what he needs to say.

Absolutly wonderful, I cannot wait for the next chapter.