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This is a great story! I really feel bad for Trunks he is finally moving on with his life and a horny Goten comes back looking a one off and a ego stork. I hope Gohan and Trunks work out.They are really good together. They seem to want to be better people for one other and for their past relationships to work out. I hope to read more soon.

What a great father and son moment with Vegeta and Trunks.
Oh dear, I hope things go well with Gohan.
Story gets better and better ^^ I hope
you update soon ^-^

Fantastic chapter! OMG. It kills me how much Goten's immaturity is ruining things for Gohan and Trunks AHHHH!! I feel for Trunks and Goten, both of course. But still--kills me.

To be honest, I'm surprised this all happened. From what I could tell in previous chapters, Goten and Trunks had progressed to wanting to re-establish a non-romantic friendship. But I guess Goten's suppressed feeling came back viciously, eh?

I really enjoyed the moment between Trunks and Vegeta as well. It was tender, yet dry at the same time, as it only could be with Vegeta. I really want Trunks to come clean with Vegeta so we can see more of that father/son interaction.

And Gohan... *tear*

I always have a soft spot for Gohan in stories because he seems like such teddy bear, yet at the same time he's mature and strong as well. Goten can have that tender quality as well, but it's often paired with naivete, which is not always as endearing to me as Gohan's persona is.

I love it so much I want to cry. I haven't read a good DBZ story in a LOOOOOOOOOONG time and I'm glad I chose this one to get back into it. It's so sad, though. I feel sorry for the friendship lost between Goten and Trunks, but I loved the development between Gohan and Trunks. They are both so hott. But now that everything is just wrong for Trunks....I want to cry. And the reluctant and subtle tenderness from Vegeta...Wonderful. You portray everyone perfectly. I have no complaints. I can't wait to read more!! You have a faithful friend in me!

I think chapter 13 was a stroke of pure brilliance! I love how real Goten’s emotions come across. He came over to extend some kind of olive branch, or maybe to try and identify any hope of rekindling the relationship, but got a nasty shock instead. As indicated in previous chapters, it’s obvious that while still feeling valid in his reasoning for parting ways, he absolutely regrets doing so. I was very impressed by the way you handled his character in that type of situation. Love is irrational, and it didn’t matter to him that he no longer had a claim on Trunks or that he himself is currently in a relationship. As soon as it became apparent that his brother was his replacement, all bets were off. I find Trunks’s reactions to the events a little strange. I’m surprised he didn’t defend himself more; he seemed very passive and let the situation escalate unnecessarily. I’m pretty sure you will elaborate on this further in the next chapter. From Vegeta’s last comments, I’m assuming Trunks’s actions were portrayed this way deliberately. I feel really sorry for Gohan (aside from being my favorite character) he really got the raw end of the deal. Hopefully Trunks will step up to the plate and prove he is serious in his affections for Gohan.

Wow, there was so much angst in this chapter even -I- started to slit my wrists! *bleeds a river of bloooooooodododododoooddd*
xD

Anyway. I wonder what happened to Gohan? Where the heck did he go? Maybe he went to Piccolo for some reconnaissance. ... If that word even applies. Anyway. He went to the green man to get some green dick to make himself feel better. :D ... Or not. *dodgey eyes*

My feet are falling asleep. Because I'm straddling my laptop. I'm attempting to hump it into submission, therefore somehow humping you into submission, so that you can post these chapters up faster. *hump hump hump* Fasterrrrrrrrr. Work that beautiful sexy mind of yours.

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*HUUUUUMMMMMMMMP!!*
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Oh, dear. Chapter 13 is one of the most intense chapters thus far. You are evil for adding that conflict, though :p. At the same time, conflicts make for interesting reading. After all, no growing relationship is without obstacles. How Gohan and Trunks overcome their particular obstacle remains to be seen :).

Goten is quite the bastard, I must say. He managed to kill that tiny part of me that was somewhat rooting for a GotenxTrunks reunion. Now, I'm 100% behind Gohan and Trunks and hope that they are able to patch things up.

It's going to be painful waiting for the next chapter. Yes, I am that hooked XD.

Aww..the ending of the fight between Trunks and Goten was quite sad. So much drama! I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter..hopefully everything will turn out better for Trunks.

Bahaha I suppose Gohan needed to get laid lmfao it probably has been a while for him ;)
OMG I cried halfway through this chapter :'( ugh I officially hate Goten more than I did from the previous chapters.I can't help but feel like he makes everything about himself instead of thinking of others feelings and the whole fight against Trunks was a little childish in my opinion XP but I suppose Saiyans don't do the whole "talking it out" thing do they? lol all in all it was a great chapter.

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*grins* The confrontation was everything I was expecting it to be, and a bit more, but not over the top with whining. Excellently written!

Poor Gohan *smuggles him away from the story* Trunks and Goten may have an outlet, but what happened to Gohan? Where'd he IT to?

Goku's scooting away from Vegeta made me laugh. Clown indeed!