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Can we have more of Ed becoming a man please *down on knees beging* Please, I'd do puppy dog eyes but it would be lost on the monitor.


My smut filled brain needs to go finish a sex scene XP, later.

""Now..." he said, turning onto his side and tugging at my lip with his teeth. "You're a man, Edward."" and I are ded from the hawtness! LOL! Whew! That was awesome! :) I don't get the enjoying the pain thing but the doing it hard, fast, and rough part was most excellent! Sometimes it's good to be strictly business and skip over the foreplay stuff. ;) Not that foreplay and romance don't have a place and are unnecessary mind you! :) *snerk* Ed won't be able to walk straight for a week after all that! XDD

"Didn't think I'd end it there, did you? Things aren't so simple. Oh, no..." Oh jeez. There you go again with more of your ebil foreshadowing! :) hmm. Should I be afraid or excited? ;) We'll see! :)

"Will the real thing live up to my fantasies?" One can only hope, my dear Edward, that it not only meets but exceeds your expectations! :D Good Lord, Ed was hot enough to melt steel when he was doing himself! I may pass out when he finally gets with Roy! XD I'm looking forward to that almost as much as Ed is! :) Moar fic soon pleez! :D

I didn't think it was possible but you just get better and better XD

I should just read one of your chapters whenever I feel cold, I'm not cold anymore!! My dear, that was hot!! I really hope Roy lives up to Ed's fantasies ^_^

I think I'm ok with feeding the addiction, I just quit smoking and I hear you shouldn't quit too many things at once so...

Ok, I really think you're corrupting me (which isn't a bad thing) because I couldn't help feeling that Al pretended to leave and was stood outside the door listening and my first reaction was 'how hot would that be' ^_~

I look forward to more XD

"There was just something in that gaze that... wasn't right." hmmm. I wonder what it was about that gaze that wasn't quite right. Was it a dark look, one that promised agony and suffering; or was it one that promised kinky delights beyond anything Ed could imagine? If it's the second option, I think Roy will be pleasantly surprised to find that Ed likes it rough. :) Roy obviously knows it's Ed's birthday and that Ed is legal so that kinda leaves the field wide open for whatever Roy might try to do. Can't wait to find out! :)

oooooooo... wanna read more! *rubs hands together excitedly* plot is thickening! I'm excited!

You have me really curious now about what Roy's up to.

The smut was hot as always XD

I look forward to the next chapter, I think I'm addicted to your smut ;P lol

Awesome. I really like that Ed is building up to the moment. It really adds a lot, the anticipation of things to come, rather that just sex in the first paragraph. And I loved that momentary slip on Roy’s part, letting Ed know that he is definitely being noticed. Keep up the great work, can’t wait for the next chapter.

"You wanted me?" *snerk* I bet he does! Don't you just love double entendre? :D Nice way to plant the seeds of lust in Roy by splaying out on the couch like that and asking him such a loaded question! XD I see Ed has a bit of the kink in him if the pain of him biting his arm and jerking off with his glove on gets him off! Such a naughty boy! ;) For some reason I really liked that Ed didn't give in to Al's subtle pleading like he usually would. Al could always get Ed to talk but I'm glad that this time Ed kept quiet. There are just some things Al doesn't need to be involved in! :) I can has moar fic pleez?

Yay, more frustrated Ed. I love how his little overactive imagination gives us more smexy scenes with him and his hand XP

'God knows how, but my little brother was the only person I knew who could translate 'puppy-dog eyes' into a tone of voice. And fuck, did it ever work if you weren't prepared.' -- That line is pure win. You're the only person I know that can sum Al up perfectly in a sentence ^_^

I look forward to more but now I must return to my own writing, the muse is calling XD