rate_review Reviews

You know...you've really set up something interesting here with Vegeta and Piccolo. The whole story of course was well-written, had me on the edge of my seat - but I couldn't help but notice something. For all that Piccolo said he was done with him, he still cared about him. That was well-handled, and created a very strong sort of tension.

If you were to decide to do a follow-up vignette to see how this resolves itself, I'd be very, very interested in reading it. And if you didn't, well, I'll just keep reading their dialogue over and over again like I have been for the past ten minutes. Those little unspoken asides were perfect.

Oh man. That was too awesome! Surely one of your best stories.^^ Vegeta was a favored one, wasn't he? Of course, who wouldn't favor him? Too bad it's finished. But I'm sure you'll come up with other stories. ^^ Nice work with this one!

This is a much better explanation for Vegeta refusing to fight and you stuck very close to the movie. Great descriptions of Brolli's transformation and power.

You even snuck a quick lemon it, though I wonder, has Piccolo finished with him for good now?

Well, this complicates things. *grins*

An interesting retelling of the movie - and an equally interesting approach to Vegeta's convoluted view of re lationships. I don't usually read fics that spotlight Vegeta - but I made an exception, and I am glad I did. Very well handled.

The second chapter was even better. I can almost feel Vegeta's fear and hopelessness. Now I'm in suspense to see what'll happen when Brolli does come after Vegeta. *Bounces in seat grinning* It makes me wonder though why they're fighting. Can Brolli actually be jealous? Or is it the same reason why Brolli hated Kakarot in the movie? I know Kakarot's jealous. (or though it seems) Hehe.

Wow, Vegeta was so brutal in this, taking out all his pent up frustration and obsession with Kakarot. Almost evil :(

Made me sorry for Brolli, which is rare.

Like how this is staying relatively close to the film so far (with added secret moments).

Pixelgoddess! You're one of my favorite authors! ^^ I'm glad you came up with another story and a good one from the looks of it. That chapter was crazyness. The way Brolli growled out Kakarot's name at the end makes me wonder if he's jealous. O.o Maybe the tables will turn and it'll be Vegeta doing that to Brolli. I can't wait 'til your next update!