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The scene with Sylvia Noventa was well done. I love the tension and her anger, Heero giving her the choice in his fate in the hope she'd have closure. I also love the quiet, uncertain vibe between Heero and Trowa at the end of this chapter. You've made these seemingly stony soldiers equally vulnerable.

Don't get discouraged. You're doing just fine, I think. I don't feel like you're losing Trowa. Besides if you feel like you are, step back for a break until it comes back to you. That's what i do. Mind you, that's probably why I am always having a billion stories going all at once and they all take ages to update because there are so many. *sweatdrops* I'm so lazy. I wanted to get some done during the holidays, but that was a bust. *sighs* I'll have to try when I'm back home and not visiting family for the holidays. Anyways, I look forwards to more updates from you soon, for this story and your others. Keep up the good work.

Xander

I love what you're doing with this fic. You're keeping Trowa's POV consistent, but at the same time, you're giving Heero a lot of depth and vulnerability, too, but not at the expense of making him a wuss.

Well, I'm still with ya, hon, and I totally understand 'keeping with the voice'. You're doing a fine job. If you have to take more time to make sure you're still in character, it's worth the wait. Better to take time and get it right than rush it and totally miss the mark you intended. ^_^ You're doing great, and this was another fine installment. ^_^

Ah, our little Trowa is learnin' all about emotions now, and is confused as hell. Which is to be expected. Still loving. I can't wait to see where you take this. Keep up the good work. ^_^

This captured that scene between Trowa and Catherine from the show very well.

I can't wait til you show more of Heero in this story. I'm loving Trowa's narrative, but i also love the exchanges between the two of them, and how he nursed Heero back to health. It's neat to see a man who takes lives trying so hard to save one.

I didn't catch a transition, but I did notice a change from first person to third.

"It was slow going, but when his entire chest was exposed, Trowa was relieved."

I'm enjoying this. I had a slight feeling this was beginning to head in the direction of 1x3 since last chapter, which initially disappointed me since I loved 3x4 fics, but I'm still really having fun reading the narrative in this.

Transition... Hm, I'm really, really bad at stuff like this. But when he realized Heero was still alive, his mind very nearly shut down. That was a new development as up till now he's been very stoic about things. But for some reason life began to take some form of meaning for him, even his own slightly. At least, that's how I read it. Maybe that's not what you were talking about. But, anyhoo, another great chapter, as always, and I can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work. ^_^

Oh me oh my. It's been quite a while since you updated and since I reviewed eh? I have a feeling we'd make a bad team...

Anyway, the flow of the story has changed a bit since you've introduced the other pilots but that was to be expected. It's still titillating as ever... it feels like I'm watching the series, but reading it, and it's in Trowa's POV. Duh I think that's what you want rofl.

Uhhhhmmm so yeah. :] All is good, I'm still pleased with this story.
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I haven't finished yet, I'm about to start chapter seven and saw where you mentioned that no one reviewed to Chapter 6. I'm a little surprised at that. This is very, very well written. You're grammar is perfect and seeing everything through Trowa's eyes is interesting. I liked hearing his thoughts on his first encounter with Quatre and really loved the part where he said for the first time that he actually cared. Writing a story in POV is very difficult, (I tend to stay away from it for that reason cause I'm lazy ^_^), but you're doing a beautiful job. Keep up the good work. ^_^