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I love this story! I wonder what dangers await Kakarrot in the city or being unclaimed?

So far I really like this story^_^ Please update as soon as possible.

Excellent plot so far, I do so yearn for a good: sweet Kakarott amidst his brethren!
Whenever I spot one it's... FINNALLY!!!

Of course, I have my standards, and it definitely doesn’t make for a good read a sloppy writing find! Which... isn't the case!! You're writing came a LOOOO-OOOONG way since I started following ‘Damn Traditions’ -since its 1st chapter, I might add. After reading THIS 1st chapter I went perusing Naruto's stories, and... WOW!! I'm reeeealy looking forward for more of 'The Turning Away'.

Back to THIS fic, the start was wonderful, the writing VERY compelling. Leaving Kakarott's plight as an unknown was a MAJOR suspense- low-shot. *pouts* I myself am checking daily for that soooo awaited update! *whines piteously*

This chapter had everything to capture an audience (myself included) and if your plots at certain times are afflicted with hyperspace syndrome, SO WHAT, I say. The great thing about fanfiction archives!? One has the power to go back and ADD to one's heart content!! *smirks*
Of course, watch out! A too lengthy plot drives the reader to skip redundant input to the juicy parts; there's a fine line between pleasant reading and a miasma of boresome pages that were long to be made but are altogether dismissed with only a cursory look. In-between is gooood! XD

Even so, the one thinks a Beta’s needed to enrich the story? There's plenty around, all right, you just have to try and pick which works better for you.
Searching for a Beta? Contact me; I'll do my best to add to your plots/skill. :P

Oh, please consider the advice: DON'T PROSCRATINATE TOO LONG! I know! With each day it becomes EVER more difficult to get back on the horse; if you love to write so much... DON'T make THAT mistake. And, contemplating on improving one's skill is all well and good but... beware not to loose sight of your own style.

Take all the time you need but... DON'T dawdle, keep on jotting down your ideas for a scene, a thought, a dialogue, an event, a description, and then put it all together in the right slots, it's better than be all whooolly concerned about skill you have in spades -compared to many out there.

Sorry for the spiel.

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In the meantime: still eagerly waits for an UPDATE.

ONE OF THE BEST STORIES I HAVE READ TODATE!! A MILLION STARS I GIVE YOU!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!

I like where this fic is going. I hope you update soon.

wonderful story

i really enjoy your stories. and you can't leave me hanging with 'turning away!'

so if you really need a beta, i will beta for you.

because i love all of your stories... -dbz and naruto- and i will gladly help out with those.

~anz

Where did you get the idea that you are a bad writer? Because you are not! I've read a lot of your stories and I always find myself enjoying them and wanting more. I realize I have probably neglected to review your stories and I apologize for my laziness. I really hope you decide to keep writing.

Purple-Moonlight

You are the 3rd of my favorite writers that wanted to give up something they love doing because some long winded writer didn't like that you don't write like them....I guess I just have a turtle shell, because if I could write, I wouldn't give a cats meow what people think. I would do it for the people that liked what I do and myself. I'm not much of a cheering section alone, but I'm sure I am not alone in my thinking. Please don't give up something you love and the fans that love your work for one persons opinion.

Noo don't stop writing just because 1 person doesn't like your writing!!
We all have mistakes in our writing, and i for one love your stories, i've read them all, so please reconsider!!!