rate_review Reviews

Hi, why? the story is good!! i love all of the stories. most of time it will take while to find a beta, so dont give up!!

NO PLEASE DONT....i really love your stories, with how you are able to keep the same attitudes that the characters have in the actually show while changing their environment. I'm not sure what mistakes your are talking about exactly, there may have been a typo but it didnt subtract from the story as a whole. So please dont delete your story because im already hooked on this one and i enjoy rereading "damn traditions" also.

Please dont delete this! Who cares what other people say! I love this story and if you are writing it so you must love this idea too! Please continue with this.

Hmn.. are you talking about my review? I sure hope that you did not take my comment the wrong way. See, if I'd thought you were a bad writer I would not have bothered to comment at all. I think you have a lot of promise as a writer. You have interesting ideas and you're developing your own writing-style. But how are you gonna do that unless you keep writing? If you want to, you can contact me via Instant Messenger (Alessariel@hotmail.de on MSN or Alessariel on YIM and AIM) and we can talk a bit about how you could improve your writing. Don't let yourself be discouraged though! Everyone starts somewhere and you are off to a better start than many others. Ganbatte ne!

I love this story so far.

Interesting start. I can tell you have a lot of ideas for this stories, and since I'm a total addict for an angsty Kakarott, I'm proabably going to stick around and see where this is going. However, you desperately need a beta, the many mistakes are really taking away from the fun. Also, don't rush things so much. This is something I noticed with your other story as well which is why I stopped reading it after a while. Take your time developing things, don't neglect descriptions, inner speech and emotions so much. It will greatly improve your writing if you heed this advice.

love your new story although i really want to know what accident happened/ and what happened to kaka...cant wait for more

what happen to goku when he was younger?? good story by the way