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October 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow good story so far. shame what happen to his mother though.
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October 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I had a feeling that King Vegeta's bearer was a third class! I just knew it! It worries me that Vegeta has to suffer through the effects of his heat for so long, for only a couple times of the year. It sounds like torture, seems like it would be maddenning. Hm, well, you can have Vegeta confront his father or something related to that. Or you can have Kakarot do some research himself. ^^ I don't know I'm just ranting. Whatever will give you an idea of what you want to write.
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October 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So that's what really happened to his bearer. Pretty nasty of the King, all over his disgust when the fight broke out at the rally. If your looking for ideas, what about a flashback from the kings point of view as to what occured then to make him so prejudice against third classes.
Seems even more hopeless for Vegeta now, but I hope love finds a way.
Seems even more hopeless for Vegeta now, but I hope love finds a way.
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh I really hope Vegeta finds a loophole so they can be together.
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October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm with Zofo. There's got to be a way for them to be together. I would say that they should mate or one of them get pregnant, but...Vegeta mentioned that was against the rules. I didn't expect Vegeta to see Kakarot during his heat. I was thinking that that was foolish, but he remained strong. Yeah, the bible seems to be filled with such oddities of language, but, it's got to be entertaining for something, right? Hehe, just kidding. ^^; Anyways, I wonder what'll happen next?
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October 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is a really great story i really am enjoying it. keep on writting i can't see what happens next. ^.^
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October 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, a cliffhanger! I was expecting one. Alright I won't mention the bible verse this time, but i'm all eager now that Vegeta and Kakarot get to see each other again. ^^ I'm in suspense as well since you won't give any hints on who's the giver or bearer. :( But I can be patient. :)
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October 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So now he knows he is the Prince now, and Vegeta now has to shake his hand, what will happen next? Please update soon as I'm dying to find out :)
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October 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aw! Poor Kakarot! I'm glad though that they know what the other is feeling now. Still, that just makes them hurt more. Aw. I like the bible verse! ^^ I may say that every time I review, so...get used to it. It's sweet, but it seems like it's a little ahead of where you are. But, I get the idea. ^^ Anyways, can't wait to see how this affects them. I hope there's a happy ending! ^^
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October 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm glad you put this chapter in Kakarot's perspective. Now we all know what he's thinking about Veggan. Though, it seems Vegeta has stronger feelings for Kakarot than Kakarot has for Vegeta. Oooo, I hope Kakarot becomes the giver! I'm a sub-Vegeta fan. ^^ But it's your story, so it doesn't matter. I'm looking forward to their next meeting.