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Thank you for yet another wonderful chapter, the change of Pov was welcome and refreshing. As for the conspiracy reguarding Goten, this chapter makes me speculate even more. Please update again when you have the time and inspiration to do so.

Excellent job! Thank you for taking the time to update once more, I'm anxious to see when Goten consciously makes the decision to recognize the tension btwn him and the shaii for what it really is :3 Please update once more when you have the time and inspiration to do so.

Bah!! Evil Cliffhanger! Still loving this story. Also, I have to say, I really like how you write your OC's. Usually I hate stories with them, but you make it so they add to the story without taking over or becoming annoying at all. Toharu is my favorite, lol. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Seriously, the best story I have ever read. Ch 19 was just amazing, Trunks's insecurities just seem so in character for him even though they were something I didn't really expect. The same with his relationship with the bodyguard, unexpected but it makes so much sense.

I looove this story and sit here anxiously awaiting every new chapter. You're an excellent author

chayron,
First let me commend you on how well put together this story is. I love reading it, and check almost everyday for an update. :) I really like how you develop the characters. Especially that you lengthen the whole story out, you must have the patient of the saint for you to be able to write such long in-depth chapters. I love your OCs and how you set up the whole government. OOOO...and the fact that elites sometimes have a white tipped tail! I'm in such anticipation about what is going to happen with Goten....whine whine whine, I have no idea what's going to happen. I know that there's some stories where you just know what's going to happen....but not this....and I'm so FRUSTRATED, but not! Gah - so fantastic! And I want some Trunks and Goten action! (not complaining though, I really enjoyed ch. 19...) Speaking of ch.19, I never realized how much Trunks could be really self-concious, but I guess it makes sense. And Trunks and Ealdira have a sweet relationship and it just makes me even more anxious for when Goten gets involved with him. :)
Really, just keep your brain cranking and you pen scrawling! You're doing a great job and I look forward to reading what you have!
- albino goddess

Wow Toharu is... in the know!

All of the main characters are lively as of late. Trunks was up kate...

I've benn busy with work and holiday stuff. I look forward to your next update.

I nearly missed this latest installment due to the vertiable deluge of dbz updates that swamped the front page.
It was really great to see some more canon characters making an appearance. I'm sitting on pins waiting for Kakarot to make his (official)grand
intro and maybe get a clearer picture of this wholse experiment thing and Gohan's death.
Also, I was happy to see some more growth in goten X trunks relaationship in the last chapter. Finally some intimacy! They are going to be quite a couple (if Trunks doesn't kill him first)
I wonder, will Goten make an appearance at Trunk's b-day fiesta, possibly at the prince's side or is that unattainable fantasy at this point?


Oh Well. Nevertheless, I eagerly look forward to next one.
~WR

Hey! I really love this story. I'm glad I gave it a chance. I'm usually a GxV reader, but this one is awesome. I've actually been reading your stories for a while, but I have been hesitant to review since it seems every time I review a story they stop writing. Hopefully that doesn't happen this time. I'm excited to see which way this story goes!

Thank you so much for updating once more. I love the progression of chemistry between Trunks and Goten, adrenaline is an easy vehicle to use. On a random note, this section just screamed innuendo to me and made me burst out laughing: It’s all fuzzy, sir,” someone shouted from the rows at the back. “And there’s this screeching sound.”

“Just give it a few slaps. How is it now?”

“Worked like magic, sir! Thanks!” The gutters are my mental home :D Thanks again, please update once more when you have the time and motivation to do so.

Oh my goooddneeesss, do you realise how much I've enjoyed reading this? Especially that last chapter, seeing the interactions between /all/ the characters (and three quarters of them are OC's!) Is absolutely great! Of course the best interactions are between Goten & Trunks! <3 I'd love to read more, and have no problems with it being a long-chaptered story, all the anticipation will just make every chapter that much sweeter! 'Till next chapter! <3

~adeusparaiso