rate_review Reviews

I absolutely loved the ending of this chapter. Trunks better watch his back with Toharu around. That kid has a sharp eye and won't hesitate to use people's weaknesses to his advantage if he thinks he can gain something from it! hahaha
As for Ranvera, it's like he's TRYING to get Trunks to hate him even more. What is that boy thinking?
These last few chapters have been really great. I await the next chapter with bated breath!

oh gosh i love this story. you do a great job with the characters.

i only have one suggestion: more trunks! more trunks! more trunks!

that is all.

You gotta love Trunks, he's just too casual-cool. Everything he says and does, when he's sitting at the desk fanning himself with the papers as if Goten isn't even the room, I laughed out loud. I love the way he patted Goten on the back to ease his pains but only made it worse after he'd failed the piloting course.

You've really captured peoples inability of keeping from being attracted to someone just because they're heavy in the lime light. Everytime you turn around the Ten has a new suiter, they're not die hards but they still give him the eye. This story is great!! I'm on chapter 9 right now, so I'm dying to catch up to the latest chapter. Thank you again for the best Goten x Trunks fic.

I have been reading this story for a long time
(and loving it),then yesterday I realized that I haven't
dropped you a line yet. (O_O)

Marvelous use of the characters! It's very rare
that I can find a plot that treats them with dignity, i.e., taking time to
flesh out their personae.
Also kudos for the mature, appropriate humor present in this. If I didn't know better,
I'd say you've been in the armed services yourself. Those drill sergeants sound like the real thing!
I'm interested to see where Goten's and Trunks' relationship goes. I feel that they already share a bond;
they understand each other on some primal level. Plus, I feel that Goten is a "half-breed" as well.

I look forward to each and every of your updates.
~WR

Thanks for updating once again, good luck with beta readers, you're all doing a great job.

This is getting more and more interesting. I would be willing to beta read if you ever need help.

This chapter seemed to be a turning point in the story for Goten. I enjoyed the comradeship Goten shared with the Shaii. Also I that scene where Goten whent to return the money to Toharu was well done.

Regarding your letter, I never received it. I went through all of my email accounts, including the spam folders and found nothing. :-(
If you would like me to be an alternate beta, send me a message on the DBZ Fanfic Salon and I'll give you my email.

Cheers!

I can beta for you if you like.

I love this story.

I love this story!!! I hope you update soon!

Poor Goten. :( Things just aren't going his way. I wonder what he will do now that he can't pilot?

Looking forward to the next chapter!