rate_review Reviews

I liked that..that was really realllllllyyyy good. It was written soooo good..n I also seen ur deviantart stuff..too..but I commented there...so..lol but anyway..this story was very hot n sexy..n well just great..You're talented in writing n drawing..and apparently damn good at both :)

AWWWWW How beautiful!!

Ha, if Goku told me he got attacked by a wild animal I probably would believe him. If it's Goku than yes it's actually a believable lie (lol). Who else can fight off a wild animal and still be perfectly fine.

Very nice. I loved the language and how things were described.

So I had this up in one tab and your picture up in another...and after I read it I went over and stared at your piccie..and...I don't know which one is more amazing!

Your language was beautiful in this. I really enjoyed the assortment of synonyms you used instead of repeating words over and over again. It made the read a lot more fluent and interesting and helped give vivid imagery to the story also. I also think that even though it was a short one shot, it stands well on it's own. The plot flows and there's a steady staircase of events that lead up to the big 'climax' of the story. xP

And although the story was more so from Vegeta's POV than Goku's, I liked how you still shed some light on Goku's perspective as well.

@.@ Another amazing piece of work from you, Lauryn! <3333

I loved how predatory Vegeta was in this but still gave Goku time to accept and made it pleasurable for him :)