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i  love it 

and i  have some ideas

hey I have some ideas

This was hot, but what would be even better as a sequel; nicol, yzak, dearka, Kira, shinn and athrun in a orgy. Yes, a six way yaoi. Think of it.... Six hot guys from the show?... Use your imigination on that one.

I agree; what would make the story even better, is that the cock size was more realstic. Yea, it's a fanfic, but I Believe it would be more enjoyable if they were to the size of their ages. While some like stories where the cock is bigger than supposed to be, for the majority, they don't.

Hey This is me reviewing. Just a bit of constructive critisism...
First of all you NEED to check your work. Spelling, Tenses etc.
Second... Actually make the story a little more believeable the average guy is 6-8 inches long... and that is fully grown... which is when they are about 21. so a 15 year old being 16 inches... way too out there. It makes it look like you have no knowledge of sex, which you must have considering you knew what a sex swing/sling was. which you need to be writing sex fics. but the overall idea was good I did like it. Athrun being a little sex slut addicted to sex, i know how he must feel. so sorry If the review hurts your feelings, just know that i did enjoy the story once I got past the grammar etc. =D Keep going you have really good ideas and you can only grow as a writer =D