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August 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm just creeping back into reading Gundam Wing fanfiction. Trowa/Quatre is my longest, truest pairing love, and I had despaired at finding new stories by new authors of my favourite boys. And then I found this! It's wonderful. Your writing style is vivid and delightful, the characterisation lovely, and the situation -- post-canon reunion -- very compelling and satisfying. There's also something nicely and subtlely subversive of fandom tropes. I especially liked this bit: "He was pure and I was tainted; that was my mentality back then. Now, I know better than to assume something so ignorant. Quatre was as tainted as the rest of us, he just cleaned up better. "
I do hope you continue with this story and keep writing for Trowa and Quatre. Thanks so much for sharing your writing. You've truly brightened my week! :)
I do hope you continue with this story and keep writing for Trowa and Quatre. Thanks so much for sharing your writing. You've truly brightened my week! :)
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March 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm not overly-fond of first-person POV but this is well-done. You've imbued a sufficient amount of tension and mystery into the characters to keep me wondering, but not too much to make it out-of-character for a Gundam pilot. Trowa's constant inability to react in social situations is so very believable.
My only complaint is that you're occasionally excessively wordy. I like colourful and unique language with detail aplenty, but it feels a tad saturated sometimes. Case in point:
"There was no describing the speed with which allowed my hasty exodus of his quarters as soon as the faucets made their journey rightward and all that could be heard from the bathroom was the soft pang of the glass door opening and the slowing drip of the shower head."
That's just tedious to read. I know what you're trying to do -- in the pursuit of avoiding repetitive language and sentence structure it's easy to fall victim to this sort of excess. ^^
Really looking forward to further installments!
My only complaint is that you're occasionally excessively wordy. I like colourful and unique language with detail aplenty, but it feels a tad saturated sometimes. Case in point:
"There was no describing the speed with which allowed my hasty exodus of his quarters as soon as the faucets made their journey rightward and all that could be heard from the bathroom was the soft pang of the glass door opening and the slowing drip of the shower head."
That's just tedious to read. I know what you're trying to do -- in the pursuit of avoiding repetitive language and sentence structure it's easy to fall victim to this sort of excess. ^^
Really looking forward to further installments!
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February 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Quick, Trowa! Run! Take the stairs! Go after Quatre!
This story's yummy. I love the cadence of the language and the metaphors, not overdone and just descriptive enough. Quatre's intelligent, sensitive and sexy. His concern for Trowa and his cluelessness about his "predicament" are touching and charming.
This story's yummy. I love the cadence of the language and the metaphors, not overdone and just descriptive enough. Quatre's intelligent, sensitive and sexy. His concern for Trowa and his cluelessness about his "predicament" are touching and charming.