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for Broken In Pieces [Discontinued]

by hidaritoki

schedule December 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I loved this series!

It's like AU but remains thruthful to the Saiyans' traditions (or what I think they should be)

I want to read more, of course, could you email me when you post the next serie? jubblesbubbles@hotmail.com
person Zofo
schedule November 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sorry for the late review - family tragedy :(

So cool that Kakarot could get to Vegeta via instant transmission, and I understand why Kakarot doesn't want to mate yet. I'm glad Vegeta is accepting his loss of the crown, but worry the king will find them somehow.

Can't wait for the sequel :)
person mgardner
schedule July 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
A very good story. I was in on it since "Lamb Without a Blemish." I do wish that you keep writing because it is very interesting and I would love to see what happens to the couple. =P
schedule July 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hehe. Yeah, I didn't know that I was the only one reviewing now. O.o I'll try and review more. Yay! Kakarot got to see Vegeta at last! *dances, then looks at the title and giggles at the irony* However there's still the issue of bringing him back to life. >< Hehe, it's a little odd knowing that Vegeta got to keep his body because of the 'good deeds' he's done. Though, it's true in this story, but not in others. X) Looking forward to more. ^^
schedule July 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Woa. O.o For a minute there I thought Kakarot was losing it. Ooooo how is Vegeta able to communicate with Kakarot from the afterlife? He couldnt be with King Kai...could he? O.o I guess there's only one way to find out. X)
schedule April 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
O.o oooo, some passionate action! :3 Too bad it didn't last very long...*silently curses Raditz for interrupting* Oh, but he'll be taken soon as well, huh? :) Wonder who that will be? O.o Yeah, i think i understand what you mean...that chapter could've been longer, but it seemed to be as long as the rest of your chapters. Not to worry though, you seem to be updating quickly lately. ^^ The ideas must be coming to you...(ugh, wish they'd come to me v.v). Anyways, always eager for more of that creativity of yours. ^^
schedule April 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
O.o Bardock and Gratto...wasn't expecting that. But that's good. Now there's another couple that we can focus on while they get Vegeta back. ^^ I wonder if King Vegeta has found out that his son is dead...and if he has, will he care? :/ Maybe he'll wish him back instead of Metga. >_> Because, who wants to wish back their son's killer? Though, he was family too...and Vegeta was planning on mating a third-class...so maybe he'll wish back Metga instead of his own son. That's just heartless. Then again, these are mere theories...i'll have to wait and see what happens. ^^
person Neith
schedule April 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see you were able to write a longer chapter and loved the ending to this chapter. :)
person Neith
schedule April 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
They're going to Earth?! Sweet, I can't wait for the next one.
schedule April 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you updated quickly! And you're right, that verse is very fitting to the chapter. ^^ Hooray for Earth! ^^ That'll be so perfect for Kakarot and Vegeta to go to...they can live in peace there. Unless the King finds out where they are. :/ (And if he brings back Metga. *growls*). I just hope that Earth still has the dragonballs. -.- Hm, I wonder who gave him the message to go to Earth? :/ Maybe I'll find out.

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