rate_review Reviews

Wow, I really enjoyed this. You did such a good job on it so far. It is really sad, but still has something kind of bitter-sweet to it. I hope to see you finished with it soon so that I can read it. I absolutely loved this! And that pairing, I would probably cringe at, but it made sense so I was pleased. XD

*Cries* Please, please, please tell me that you haven't abandoned it! One last chapter! I'm sorry, normally I won't get all worked up like this, but this is one of - if not the - best fanfictions I've ever read! (Trust me honey, that's a lot) I really hope that you're working on it, or at least are thinking about it. (Again, sorry if I'm annoying the crap out of you, and, yes, I know that it takes time, so I won't accuse you of anything)
Thank you, for writing this story, and for listening to (and probably laughing at) my incessent begging.
I have two favors to ask of you, though you have every right to ignore them.
1. If/when you do update this, or any, fictions, please notify me at anniehdz@hotmail. I would love to read them
2. Write more, please. This is more begging! (Insert long rant here) This is more begging!

Many thanks,
Annie

Very nice! I've been meaning to leave a review. There isn't enough fanfiction involving a Goku x Trunks pairing. Although I'm a fan of Truten as well. :)
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Ooh. I like the twist. Something unexpected. I look forward to the update. :)

What do you mean, you haven't posted chapter 3 yet?

I'm going to say first and foremost, that I really like your almost sociopathic characterization of Goku. That's just so intriguing that I can't stop pondering it.

But it was the chapter on the whole that I enjoyed, really. I spent the whole time thinking that there was something I should have figured out by now, if only I was a tad more perceptive. After the big reveal at the end I do believe I'm going to have to re-read it all in the context of knowing what's going to happen so I can understand the clues when they're offered up.

And you have me grinning about the pairing in here. I would come back just to see that, I think.

I actually read this last night, though I was way too tired afterward to leave a comment. That didn't mean I didn't enjoy it! Once again have I fallen in love. I knew something smelled a bit odd when Trunks noticed Goku was between his legs. Poor Goku. I wonder what was going through his mind when all of it was happening, since it isn't really Trunks he's after. He's more so after Trunks' /source/. ^_^;;

Thank you once again for giving me some nightly entertainment!
See you in the next (and final?) chapter!

Goku, your behaviour is TOTALLY UNACCEPTABLE. I don't care if you have the blessing of the Pope himself! Quit being such a creeper.

Man. Ever since the Cell saga, Goku has given me the willies. This chapter completely captures all the reasons why.

:)

I'm so proud that my stories could in some way inspire this amazing fic.

Re: Goku I'm tempted to agree with the reviewer above me since it really does seem like Goku is taking advantage of a very screwed up Trunks. And, as you know, I'm not Goku's biggest fan to begin with but I'm reserving judgment until the end. AND in the meantime I'm gonna enjoy me some crazy hot Truku action guilt-free because I know Trunks will be loving it anyway (IF he makes the decision to go through with it). The handjob was written really well...I know that's a weird compliment for a handjob but...it really was. Trunks's feelings about it were very realistic. And the dream at the end was HOT. Oh the angst! I'm dying to know what Goku is up to, what Goten is THINKING, and what the hell Trunks did to deserve all this.

*Sigh* you're killing me here...

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That was probably the most interesting sex scene I have ever read. Certainly among the best written. And, though there was nothing funny about it, the idea of masturbating with a waterfall had me giggling.

Now, content. You, madam, are a good writer. You know how I can tell? I usually really, really hate first person present tense narrative. I find that most people can't utilize it effectively and the story fails because of it. Here, I didn't even realize you were doing it until the very very end, literally the last two sentences. That is a testament to your talent.

The other thing is that you have a very interesting way with words. I can't describe what I mean by that, but it just oozes readability even though it's all very fraught.

As for the story itself, it's definitely a strong start. I'll withhold full judgment until more of the plot, situation, etc., is made clear, but I can see this being a very worthwhile read.

Well, you got my attention, anyway.

Really excited to be reading this! :) This is my favourite pairing in DBZ fandom, by far.

Poor Trunks. This drama has the stink of Chichi all over it. I'm onto you, lady. Don't think I'm not! (Even if it doesn't end up being her fault, I'm still totally blaming her.)

This is a really good first chapter and I am anxiously anticipating a second.