rate_review Reviews

This story is interesting. I find myself really wanting to know what's going to happen (and what has already happened). But the spelling, grammar, language, style, and form...yikes. Are you a native English speaker? Either way, you should really consider getting a beta. The tense-shifting and odd sentence structure really take away from what could be a very emotional story. No offense.

Hey there! I absolutely love your story "the broken road" I have read it multiple times.

Yeah okay, here's the problem. I write in a word composition program that is not accepted to be uploaded to this site, for some odd reason. So when I transfer it to the format that is accepted, a plain document, my computer replicates words randomly, changes spelling sometimes, or even omits the entire sentence.

I am honestly a native English Language, but it is hidden from the program mix ups. I do try to beta it, but I feel I want to get the story out more quickly.

My writing style is not the best and I know that, I am not a born author. I really do try though and I am sure this does not mean anything to a great writer, but this is my first ever solo-written fan fiction.

I am sorry to disappoint such a great writer like yourself. I truly admire your work.

Sandmaster

I think that this story is very interesting;
though I'm not a huge fan of the style of writing, everyone's intitled to their own thing.
But I do think that it's hard to relate to your style for me because it seems simplistic in form.
I am sort of wondering what's going on with Videl, and how her death ties into the story. And what is Gohan's Secret?
Update soon.