rate_review Reviews

This has been such a great story and you've given great life to these characters. I hope you continue writing stories because they are an easy and enjoyable read. If you've published stories elsewhere I'd like to know.

Intense chapter and a great read. Really enjoyed how you used 18 in this chapter and channeled her anger. I hope you update again soon because that's one hell of a cliffhanger.

This story is so incredible. You've found just the right balance between lemon and action. I can't wait for next chapter. But somehow 18 has to either survive or be brought back. Thanks for writing!

Another great chapter, and I always look forward to what's going to happen next. Should be interesting when 18 gets in the action.

great chapter, loved the rooftop idea

Crazy turn of events. I'm not sure how I feel about it yet but I guess that's what makes great drama.

Okay, first off, I love the story and I think it's great. The Trunks, 18 angle is definitely different and I love the creativity and the way you went about it. Lots of props to you. I thought you handled the building of their relationship really well and definitely kept me invested in the story. You did a good job with the lemon scenes, I saw that you said you were new to writing them. The banter between 18 and Trunks is what really makes the story for me. The part where he was eating and 18 talked about her ass telepathically was great. I could so see her doing shit like that because of how much she likes to mess with people. The only thing that disappointed me was that you didn't have more stories published about Dragon Ball that I could read, but I can live with that cause I've enjoyed this one so much. I agree with another reviewer however, in that I'm curious what you're gonna do with 13 since Trunks should pretty much be stronger than nearly all villains that are left. But hey it's your story and creativity works fine for me. I liked the jealous 18 angle too. Just imagine if how jealous she would be if you brought Videl into the story. I know most assume she was dead in this time line or insignificant because Gohan dies, but ehh. And don't be so hard on your filler chapter, I like them, I think they add depth to the story because it goes pretty quick from one villain to the next. So thanks again, love the story, and keep doing an awesome job!

XD i know who it is... i wont say who if you other's dont know but wouldnt trunks recongize him?

lol i forgot you had him ware a mask but wouldnt he be weak to trunk's now? or even 18? or is stronger than before?

i am just going to point out that bojack stood no chance when ss2 gohan fought him. and when king kai's world got destroyed thats what unleased him a seal with all the kai's planets and whith his gone he got free