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I love the story, cannot wait for updates. As for the part about King kai's planet, Yes Goku and IT to it. He did it in the Cell Saga when Cell was going to blow himself up. He IT himself and Cell to king kai's planet. Which he didn't have his halo at that time.

I'm so happy to see that Vegeta is fighting off the possession. Lol, that sneaky bastard is in for a surprise when Vegeta realizes what he's up too. I certainly hope the you make it a viscous and bloody end for him (I am talking about Vegetas guest..for some reason I can't remember his name...lol)
Great chapter btw! Hurry up and mate Gohan and Von, already! There is a screaming lack of sex here..lol. What can I say? If I didn't like the way that you spell things out, I wouldn't be so damn addicted to begin with! And, I SO am!
Update again, soon please!
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I'm not surprised Piccolo was there to interfer if necessary. Poor Piccolo - to want to help in ways he's not equipped to! :(

Yeah, Von is very outclassed as far as Gohan is concerned. Gohan is certainly going to have to let somethings happen, because Von isn't in a position he can make them happen.

And of course, I'd really like to know what Goku and Gohan were doing for a week. :P

I hope Vegeta figures out what his shipmate is doing to his thoughts in time!

Thank you for the great update! I love this story so much - one of my favorites!

-growls- damn that Dunduil! Dumbduil is more like it...hehe, i made a funny. We're never gonna get a lemon at this rate...i need a lemon like i need air. I need my fix! >< And quit torturing Gohan. Just...someone fuck him already. And when are Vegeta and Fronshir gonna do it? Cuz that's just inevitable. Ugh! So many chances and no one's either taking it or screwing it up. Idiots! And Von sounds hot, so he has to get laid. -sighs- Lemon. Next chapter. Do it. -_-

Chapter 16 - yum! Loving all the limes with the high emotions mixed in. You're writing is getting the message across well!

Von and Gohan - so close! I hope Gohan manages to get Von alone, and it doesn't turn out to be a free-for-all. And yes, I did notice the very short mention of G/Gh. Tempting! Ah - Piccolo i going to be jealous. And I'm wondering how Gohan is going to break this all to Videl, because there is no way Videl is going to be enough for him when the full cycle hits him.

I loved the way Vegeta's thoughts finally circled around and focused on Goku. Fronshir picked a good moment to get an eyeful!

Hopefully I can get to chapter 17 tomrrow.

Ack! NO! Fronshir - I knew Vegeta shouldn't trust him!!!!! But I also understand now why he did.

So, Goku has plans and that includes using the other Saiyans to find Vegeta in some way. And Piccolo got to show off a little without having to tear someone's head off. But there was certainly a lot of missing Gohan in this chapter. *pouts*

Now I want to read chater 18!

I found this story two days ago and read it in two "yaoi power sessions". I'm really enjoying it and can't wait to see how it develops. I'm always wary of stories in which new Saiyajin come to Earth, but you've given these new characters believable pasts and interesting "baggage" :-) The only constructive criticism I can offer concerns the typing errors, which aren't a deal breaker but they can/do distract from the flow of the text, and when you change tense from past to present and back in-text. You've got another fan!

I knew it. O.o I knew Fronshir was up to something. Was he the one that that one Saiyan was talking to when they landed? Or...was that someone else? Oh and...can't Goku go to King Kai so he can have a peek at what the planet looks like so he can IT there? I don't know if you've thought of that already or you just want a different way of going about it. Maybe you're planning on having Vegeta get captured and then Goku has to save him? Perhaps there will be a break in the link and Goku will be able sense him? Maybe he'll be able to when Fronshir gets Vegeta into the mind fields? Eh, just wondering what's gonna happen.

I am intrested in the relationship between Trunks and Gohan, there seems to be a bit there about it but not much to think alot about it. Great story I love it.