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:D The lemon was a wonderful treat! I liked the backdrop for it, you described the scenery very well. With Goku’s aggressiveness, I wasn’t expecting Vegeta to take control, but it turned out very well. :D
Gohan’s wandering thoughts make me wonder what else you have planned for this story.

Oh it's heating up!

Eagerly awaiting the next update :)

very interesting! I wonder whats got everyone so obsessed with Vegeta? I don't think I've ever read anything quite like this before! Loking forward to more.

Oh and I think this chapter was pasted twice.

Wow...it was well worth the wait! Poor Piccolo, trying to get Gohan to see what is so obvious to him. You're pretty much going to have to hit him directly between the eyes with it Piccolo - other wise, you're never going to get that Son to talk about what happened, or what is happening.

Goku and Vegeta. Yummy - it might be the formatting, but to me, this chapter seems as though you slowed down and really took your time to write everything you were seeing in a way that was very well communicated with the reader. :) Wonderful job!

P.S. It looks like you posted chapter 4 twice in the same chapter.

Okay - finished chapter 2!

One of the many great things about DBZ is the transformation factor. It makes for so many possibilities! :P

Now to see if Vegeta's plans actually take place, or if Goku manages to take things to places Vegeta never dreamed of.

AH! Throwing Piccolo and Gohan into the mix! O.o That certainly makes it more interesting! I wonder when Gohan will try to talk to Piccolo and whether or not that will make the Namek try to get answers out of Vegeta, quicker.

Maybe it's a good thing things got interupted - it wasn't going how Vegeta had planned, and yet Goku didn't quite know what he was doing. Talk about awkward! :P

I just noticed the update! Now I have two chapters to catch up on. I'm at the very beginning of chapter 2 and my reading time is down to minimum, so it may take me a bit to catch up.

I'm excited about this update!

Ahhh drat Gohan interrupted them, now I have to wait for the next chapter, or maybe more! Poor Goku not really knowing what's going on but typically he's still happy-go-lucky with it :)

No lemon but I liked the update for the great look into Gohan's thoughts and confusing reactions to Vegeta as a Saiyan. I admit when he first showed up and you described his face as 'angelic' and that he was pouting I thought this was going to be one of the stories where Gohan is whiny, oblivious to anything Saiyan, and generally just in the way and annoying. I really loved the part where Gohan was thinking about how hard he tries to hide how different he is from his mother, as his father does, and how it is irritating to see Vegeta so unapologetic and unafraid to act as himself in comparison, though, and now I'm glad Gohan is in the story. So glad you brought up that canon scene on Namek that was so thrillingly evil as Vegeta softly spoke to Gohan and touched his face, before kneeing him in the stomach and promising to kill his father and laughing as he flew off-but still leaving Gohan alive.

The reveal about how much Goku thought of Vegeta was very nice, and I never would have expected Goku to be so affected that he couldn't stand to see the prince sometimes when he didn't know how to talk to him or connect with him. A little curious if the sub/dom relationship is a rigid, important thing in this story or if it can switch between them or even if Goku is so odd he lets the general expectations of those roles be redefined. A little surprised Vegeta didn't have an obvious and absolute opinion on which role he wanted, but maybe his mind was fuzzed by hormones, too.

I'm really looking forward to seeing this continue and some more about the transformation and instincts that both Goku and Gohan are still in the dark about. Thanks for updating!

Oooo a new story from you, wonderful :)

I'm loving the new form, I picture it similar to SS4 but with not so much fur. Vegeta is being such a tease but I wonder if he can really control Goku.