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wow this story is great. i hope kakarott and vegeta figure out that love is love, not matter the gender.

That is a very quick update. Thanks. Love the tension when t hey face each other naked. Wow, let's see how they are going to survive this.

Goodness dear, you're torturing the characters and the readers. :p Kakarot will give. I sense this, hehe. At least, he better. >.> When I was first reading it, I thought you skipped the lemon and was about to flame you big time, but read on and was relieved to see that you didn't. :) You write tasty lemons...the kind that Mexicans eat that are more sweet than sour, oh yes, they is good. ;) I was going to write that story, but like I said, not much was going on with it so I changed the theme. Perhaps a better plot will come to mind with this theme and I'll think about writing it. Hehe, you'll have to be specific. None of my stories are finished, except for my one shots and only one of 'em is good. >.> I'm really trying to finish the one's I posted and am working on the ones that aren't, since inspiration seems to come and go as it pleases. I'm actually stuck in the middle of writing Deceitful Allies and Trustworthy Foes, since I have no idea how to end it, but it's slowly coming together. It all is. Anyway, you should write a horror story! :D I'm sure you'll be good at it. ^^ I'll be looking forward to it. X)

Oh my gawd! I was thinking about writing a story like this! O.o How creepy. Except I was thinking more along the lines of Vegeta and Kakarot being reincarnations of a Pharoah and his past lover and one of them had the lover's soul and was working on bringing the Pharoah back...like The Mummy sort of, but it was turning out to be more of a daydream than an actual idea. Instead, I changed the theme to a ghost story sort of setting. x) Still working on the plot, but...it's coming together. Anyway, this is pretty good. It's a bit different since Kakarot stepped up into the ranks of greatness instead of staying as a third class. ;) Even though it's peaked my interest, I'm still in more suspense on one of your stories...that you just updated. :p However, it's too soon to tell yet. Yes, you are a busy one. O.o I hope you finish all of them. :o Also dear, you have many typos. :/ Usually I don't point that out because...well, who doesn't? But there were actually a couple sentences that I couldn't understand because of them. I know you're excited, but you have all the time in the world. :) Just don't take as long as me. >.> I'm still looking for the inspiration...and the time. >< Anyway, I shall keep an eye out for this one. ^^

I like this so far. The Egyptian theme makes it all the more interesting and since he's telling it as something that happened already, I'm curious to know what exactly happened to them and everyone around them. I would love it if someone drew a fanart of them as Egyptians. I can actually picture Vegeta as a Pharaoh and Goku as the high priest. Anywho, it's intriguing so far. Good job.

The tension the tension, thick as wall. Love how you describe the suspension. Don't worry about angst. As a matter of fact I love angst before happy ending. It is just sad ending made me depressed for days so I try to avoid sadden myself. Plus I don't like to disturb author plot as you must have plotted it out. If I can not take it I can always not read. So don't restrict yourself. Write what you feel right. You write better story that way.

Interesting setting, I love all the old Egypt stories, did a project on it long ago in school :)

If they are so turned on by each other by just meeting eyes and brief touching, how on earth are they going to survive the bath!

Wow this looks promising! Forbidden love! I can see sparks flying. Kakarotto in lust is pure sexy. Love the way you describe his thoughts. But wait what do you mean by my last days? Is it a sad ending again? Please warn me. I don't want cry my eyes out for kaka like last time.