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Wow, what an interesting AU you've got here... quite the timeline, imagine how differently DBZ would have gone if Gohan and Android Eighteen somehow fell in love.  Well, as they say in Rick and Morty, infinite realities.   Imagine, Krillin would still be alone, his daughter wouldn't exist, what if everyone found out? Would there be a simpler solution to all this, wow, this would be a clusterfuck, imagine, they try to destroy Android eigthteen(not that they could.) and Gohan attacks them.   I'm sure Gohan would obliterate Cell way before he caused any real trouble, my mind reels with possibilities.  But it would mostly be a clusterfuck.

That was awesome I loved it all I think she shoud be and end up with him and not Krillin

Ilike the part with her getting pregnant and 18 turning Videl in to her sex pet and maybe Gohan and for his last girl it should be Bulla that would be awesome beyond awesome

Wonderful story, and I have a couple of fair suggestions regarding where to go, should you decide to continue the story. Firstly, it would require a rework in the story of Dragonball Z to the point where it would become AU and you make 18 the love interest of Gohan, which would create some amusing friction and drama when Videl enters the picture, not to mention Chi-Chi, plus Gohan would have far less qualms about going all out once Cell devours 18. Secondly, I would try to work Krillin's attempt at a relationship with 18 to clash with Gohan's new-found attraction to her, seeing the two come to a head over her would create a nice bit of drama, and sexual tension to boot. My final idea goes fairly dark, Gohan fails to rescue 18 during his fight with Cell, the devestation and resulting actions of the confused youth would be... phenomenal.

That was so COOOOL!

Well I've given much thoughts to doinng more chapters and despite much pressing, I've ddecidedd a long winded story would become tacky. The only idea I've had was something taking place at the end of the cell games where Gohan has comfort sex with 18 to console himself after his father's death. Tright maybe, but an idea i'm willing to work with...

I think it would be à good idea to continue where you are at. You coupe start the next chapter with all 4 of them in THE van riding to THE shore so they could get to KAMI House. Eighteen grows feelings for Gohan, and Seventeen won't really care. Sixteen is after Goku zo Gohan isnt minded by him. You could probably improvise from here...

So when this nice story will get next chapter??? is the Story already in process of making ?
I like the idea to add Bulma at least consider adding her in the story to.
I like Gohan/Bulma mix. :P

The idea gives the feeling and looks that can be even give room for funny situations with some embarrassing situations, nice base for actual long story so one more point there.
It would be nice to get some story with adult context that has more deeper story telling. the only other one i seen like that was Reprogrammed and is a very good story i would not mind to get one more like that.
the author know how to write a lot of details so it would be interesting to see how would he do with given option.

The chapter 1 look interesting even if it's just about Gohan and 18 first encounter and it was all about XXX you could use it for making alink between then at least at first purely sexually and use the given base to make more deeper story and bond between them it would make pretty good story in my opinion.(i will assume that you will continue to make more of the current story with the base story offered to validation)

The given base story i give it 9/10 - it is clear that it was a rushed and made fast for base plot but given that in consideration i set for mark 9.

Nice story. Will there will be more of it?
I like the way of thinking in that sugestion it has good possible connection with fist chapter.