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hey can I be in the next chapter

I love this! I wish you'd update it. :D

Wow, the story is developing very well.
I love how Piccolo and Gohan get closer.
Bulma and Vegeta's reactions are great and Goku is good, too.

I can't wait for more, so thanks for writing and sharing!

Surprisingly well written! :) I'm glad I went to 'latest' rather than 'yaoi' section like I normally do, I would have missed this. Finished chapter 1, I'll have to catch up over th weekend.

Goku with a creep grin gave me the willies...O.o...Thankfully Vegeta was there in time! Poor Piccolo - I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next!

OMG, I love this story!!!

I love your characters, I love the background information, I love how they all have sound reasons to do things!
The sex was hot and your Vegeta was great. Your Piccolo was great too in helping Gohan.
The turn of tables Gohan did to Vegeta was surprising and I loved it.
Goku's reaction to Vegeta made the whole chapter fantastic.

Thanks for writing this and I can't wait for more!

Oh WOW!!!
A wonderful beginning!
I love the Gohan/Piccolo pairing(especially with Gohan on top).

Thanks for making Vegeta rational, so that he could explain everything and hold Goku back.
I can hardly wait for more.

I thing your characters are very in character and I love your Vegeta, I think I will love your Piccolo too.
SO, thanks for writing this fic!