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April 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
LOVE IT. Your characterizations are really good in this, and no major grammar/spelling errors (pet peeve of mine)
9/10 with slight points off for pacing. You could have done a little more with Talas internal dialogue like you did with Kai's. Can't come up with anything more than that!
9/10 with slight points off for pacing. You could have done a little more with Talas internal dialogue like you did with Kai's. Can't come up with anything more than that!