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I would like to tell you that I've been reading this story, this time more carefully (my native language is not English so i go slowly) and I would say that is sadly beautiful. I love to get into this story and, at the tortures scenes, i can imagine at vegeta being extremely gorgeous as never .... but at the same time ... it makes me sad, I feel depressed ...you really touched me! I would like to know how you can get to write with that much detail the particular aspects of the vegeta's darks experiences and freezer's twisted maneuvers. It would be a great personal pleasure for me if i could ever read something written by your hand based on the freezer resurrection and his meeting with Vegeta, it would be a truly exquisite pleasure reading specifically from you. not even if i were a writer could do it so amazing. In this regard, I'll tell you the same way that vegeta tell to freezer in that dream "Do not leave me. I can not do it on my own".......(the chapter of this line was one of the most impressive to me...) congratulations...i really admire your amazing talent. don't stop!!!

I love that story so much...i would like have the honor to keep it on my kindle, would you like to published both stories in a web site called "archive of our own"? i would love donwload it from there. congratulations, you´re amazing. Read your fanfic caused me the same satisfaction that give me read authors like stephen King, you are really great

Are you Akira Toriyama.... covert???jajajaja!!! I can´t imagine nothing more close to Vegeta. Its impressive to me how you can develope the character of Vegeta, how intimate you can describe him, also how coherent can be this hidden part of his life with of what is describe in the serie...i love Vegeta now more than ever....amazing, really AMAZING....but also the way you describe the physical pain, the internal emotional trauma and the physiologic reactions of Vegeta´s (wonderful) body, i admire you so much...write something again please...continue this or make something new (about Vegeta preferably). Congratulations!! I will follow you

Great story!!! Poor Vegeta. Any chance there will be a part 3? Please.

So I know this story's been out for quite a while, but I've read both parts and just wanted to say that this is the best portrayal of Freeza I've ever seen in a fanfic. It's obvious from the original version of the show that he very much enjoyed torture. Whether there could have been a sexual aspect to Freeza's sadism was unclear based on how little was revealed about Freeza's species--though there were possibly some hints (methinks he liked drinking human/saiyan blood a little too much). You explored this tastefully without giving too much away; it's all easily interpreted as a fundamental desire to humiliate Vegeta and control him down to his every basic need. Even better is how the entire drama flows so seamlessly into the show's plot and adds background to a relationship which I feel deserved more attention in the series.

I feel bad for not having reviewed the very ending of this fic. I've been trying to gather my thoughts. In a previous chapter, Zarbon says "You monkey scum," as Vegeta, Nappa, and Raditz walk away. It took a bit for me to really digest that scene and here's the reason why. In many fanfics, Vegeta is constantly verbally abused by Frieza and his men. It just seems to roll off Vegeta's back. But in your story, Vegeta had been one of Frieza's favored. He had been spoiled. He had honestly believed himself to be equal to Frieza. As someone who truly believed in his own strength, pride, and respect...that line was beyond terrible. So simple and short, yet "you monkey scum" was so degrading and shocking, I can see why Vegeta realized he had never had Frieza's respect or adoration...ever.

Now, the ending. At first, I was like...okay, we've seen all this in the show. HOWEVER, when you revealed that he still had the K.R.I. device inside him, I was like, okay, that's somewhat convenient for the plot. BUT THEN, I thought about it (hence the delayed review) and I was like, "WOAH. Vegeta never could have won against Frieza." He could win against androids, Cell, or Buu....but not Frieza: his main tormentor and controller of the K.R.I. device. You made Frieza so sick, so twisted, so obsessed with Vegeta, that he allowed Vegeta to kill almost his entire army JUST to crush his pride and arrogance in the final battle that ended his life. How absolutely horrible. How brilliant on your part! What absolute, true, sick abuse.

Your writing is astounding and you do your research well. I would love to see what you bring us in the future. Your Vegeta is spot-on and your character analyses is so good, I sometimes want to stop writing, because I know I'lll never be that good. But really, your work is excellent. Great stuff!

Nawww the end. :( Honestly, if you re-wrote the entire series, I'd so read it. It's so horrible knowing that everything that Vegeta went through...was for nothing. Even when he comes back to life and Frieza dies, his torment isn't over. He still lives in the shadow of someone stronger than him then pretty much lives out the remainder of his life trying to become stronger. Funny...even though GT and AF don't really go with the series or are real for that matter, it sounds to me that, even though Vegeta was slower in gaining his power, he's still in more control of it than Goku. I mean, even when they both had tails and turned Oozaru, Vegeta was more in control than Goku, but then again, he had training. Then in GT, Goku mentioned that he didn't have much control in his SS4 form and Vegeta didn't seem to have any troubles with it, but he didn't voice it either. Eh, I don't know. I could analyze the series in so many different ways that anything sounds possible, but I digress...anyway, this story was amazing and so was the first part. Your imagination took mine to places that it never thought of to go that my mind is now reeling in the true torture that you developed on Vegeta. As I soak it all in, I'm truly curious in what else your creative mind will come up with. :) I do hope to see from you again and will expect more from you in the future. Thank you for this wonderful read and good luck to your future writing. ;)

Awesome work! Keep it up!

Brilliant. Really, an amazing set-up, an amazing way to show what was happening on Vegeta and Nappa's side during Raditz's battle. Your Vegeta is the most authentic Vegeta I have ever read. He is exactly how he was written when he first arrived in the show. I can tell that you have read the manga, watched the show, and have noticed EVERY detail leading up to the epic battle on Earth. Your writing is so good, I feel like I cannot fully convey how accurate your portrayal of Vegeta and the entire Frieza army is. Looking forward to what happens from here...seeing it from Vegeta's perspective.

Holy crap! That was so fucked up! :o ...and strange and confusing and...just completely...just...I don't know! It was madness ok? It was crazy! At first, I thought Vegeta was in heat, but then all that stuff about being in Freiza's place kinda made me think that it was a dream, but it also seemed so real to me. How did you do that? O.o You're so good at explaining situations in great detail that it makes me wonder what I'm reading! I'm just so baffled! You know, for posting a story for the first time, it makes me wonder if you're actually studying writing...or maybe you're a doctor. O.o Kinda scary, hehe. However, you have a great talent for this and I can't wait to see what else you'll pull out of your sleeve. I'm really looking forward to more, but at the same time, I'm hesitant to read more lol. It's been so long since I've read a horror story and this is one of the rare cases where it's actually very well written. I have mixed feelings about this story, but don't worry, I'll keep reading til the end. :)