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I loved it! Such a great story all around. The build up! The everything! <3

I've read the whole story and I think it was really really good. I think I've read most Mirai Gohan/Mirai Trunks stories and yours stand out as one of the best. I think you've described the characters' emotions brilliantly. You've retained the feel of the future timeline that we know from "The History of Trunks" TV special while also adding an even bigger emotional aspect to the story. You've taken characters we know and love and added a believable layer of emotion. I do believe you should edit your introduction for your story as for me it is not so much porn with plot as it is PLOT with porn added for good measure. I think it may put people like me off who like reading a believable story and also doesn't do justice to your writing talent. All in all, a very satisfying read that kept me comiing back for me, congratulations :)

I love the pairing Gohan/Trunks. It’s my favorite. I love bottom Trunks, and I also love bottom future Trunks. I thought it was really sad when Gohan died. Poor Trunks. I loved this story so much! Could you please write another chapter story with the same pairing?

Headcannon. Definitely headcannon. Great job drawing out the awkward teenager along with the PTSD saiyan lust. It's believable, hot, and a good story all at once. The alternate ending is pretty good and rather satisfying as it is, almost more of an epi-epilogue. If you torture your characters enough, after all, it's nice to give them a happy ending here and there. Thanks for the fun read!

Yay! I loved it! I had been following this then waited for it to be completed then got busy and put it out of my mind until yesterday when I sat and reread the entire thing. This is now one of my favorite DBZ fanfics and can add it to my list of wonderfully written and beautiful examples of story telling. This was great and I'm so glad that you finished it. I look forward to anything else you write.

I'm still waiting on that alternative ending but I wanted to review now anyways. The ending was better than I expected since I wasn't quite sure where you were planning on ending it. I love how you took everything full circle with Trunks seeing Gohan defeat Cell, as it was Gohan who defeated him. What an immense pleasure that must have been for Trunks and I've never thought about it that way before. I like, too, how you were planning on having Trunks go to New Namek and wish back Piccolo and the others, the only thing that will suck about that is that Goku can't come back, but oh well, again, it's a interesting idea for this Trunks to be cleaving to, it makes a lot of sense and leads the reader to hope for the future of their relationship and their world.

I did want to say that I loved the last lemon and that I think Bulma's silences spoke volumes in this story, even lead me to wonder if she really knew more than she let on. Even though we already knew what was going to happen you still wrote it out in a way that seemed fresh and wasn't totally predictable and you added your own ideas and way of putting it into words. The jump around at the beginning of the chapter from past to present threw me off at first even though I kind of expected it, I think it was just because I didn't want it to be over.

Again I look forward to more from you and I'm so glad that you started posting on here.

TristaML

One of the best I've ever read, honestly. The characters and emotions are so real. Of course I knew how it was going to end...but it still hit me hard. I can't wait to read the Epilogue and I hope you write more GohanxTrunks in the future. You're an amazing author.

Now THAT was an emotional chapter.

Still impressed with every read. No editing mistakes that I can see. and your limes are sublime. I read this in a very crowded very impersonal setting (I.e. bar ) and still fell completely into it, ignoring everything around me. This is the story I most look forward to the update on. Keep it up seriously.

I love this so far. This is my favorite pairing but it can be hard to find stories written for them so I'm always excited to see a new one. I think that your writing is very good and that the combination of plot and smut is perfect. Building up the characters and the scenes just makes the yummy scenes that much better. I like how you have personified Gohan especially. The explanation for his excitement makes perfect sense and works well to explain some of his sexually aggressive feelings. I love it. I also love Trunks and his hard working yet youthful mindset. Fiction is the perfect place to experiment with what - if scenarios and the idea behind this one is believable and excellent. I am looking forward to reading more from you too. Please continue this story but take your time to make it a level that you can look back on later and be satisfied with. Us readers will wait for something worthwhile, Trust me!