rate_review Reviews

great story

Cute!

New chapter and the wait was SOOOO worth it! I love this story. L-O-V-E!

One of the best in a long while. Please don't give up on this story. I love it. :)

I've been reading this since you first started posting it and I'm enjoying it shoot. I won't say it isn't typical but I will say it's well done and unpredictable. I like your Bulma and even though there are some things in the writing that are bothersome they aren't deal breakers I think some of it is just took not being caught when you proof read... Every one has that problem who doesn't have a beta... Take your time to read over what you've written like you've never read it before that should help. All in all it has been years since I've read a BV fic that I like since i got into yaoi and I'm happy I found one. Looking forward to the next chapter!

TristaML

omg the scene with the wolves slayed me! I could honestly hear Vegetas voice

Very interesting take between Vegeta and Bulma. Hilarious in some spots, heart-stopping in others... I absolutely LOOOVVVEEEE this story. Favorite part was when Vegeta was watching the wolf documentary and began to notice that something is up with Bulma's actions. WOW. Pure genius! It's actually inspired me to write my own, but I'm juggling literally three stories right now (holy shit) to be honest. I'll get around to it eventually, I suppose. You're doing a fantastic job but I can't wait to see more!

However... (I hope you don't get upset or anything, because I understand that you accept constructive criticism.)
All were in-character 99% of the time and the plot is definitely solid, but I'm not really a fan of your choice of words in some parts of the story. For example, it's quite repetitive. (For example: His neck snapped when he looked her way.) I literally think of Vegeta's neck breaking in half because he turned his head too fast (Ouch.) I recommend shaking the variety of your words up a bit :) I had that problem too, and I actually still somewhat do to this day.

You're still doing a fantastic job. (: Absolutely love your story!

Hurray for another new chapter :D The wolf thing was brilliant. Vegeta ALMOST had Bulma figured out. What a way to leave us hanging with Bulma all snuggled up in Vegeta's bed. Wonder what will happen when the proud Saiyan prince gets back and finds our favorite blue-haired beauty in his bed. He DID invite her after all ;)

New chapter!! Juicy juicy. I really do love how things are going and I agree, it is kinda soon but I love how the tension between the two is building. Bulma doesn't seem the type to just jump into bed with anyone and Vegeta is too proud to give into temptation so quickly. I can't wait for the next chapter! Have I mentioned that this is the best gap story I've read?? ;)

What a great story! I love what you have so far and I can't wait to see how it all progresses. I feel that you did a great job with keeping the characters true and also with adding just a tiny bit more of emotion to Vegeta. Best Bulma/Vegeta get together story that I've read so far and you left me wanting more after each chapter. Keep up the amazing writing and I will continue to come back reading.