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I love how Piccolo and Vegeta are pretty close friends, and it was nice to see how Piccolo's heart kind of broke a bit when he figured out that Vegeta blamed himself for being raped and that it had happened before. I also loved Piccolo and Goku's talk, I thought it was funny how Goku's finally figuring out that Vegeta loves him and Piccolo's sitting there waiting for the light bulb to flip on in his head. Vegeta seems to have a trick up his sleeve but things don't look good for him T~T

Damn, three chapters nearly back to back; I am one happy camper. And oh the angst, it’s like you’ve ripped my heart out of my chest. I feel so much for Vegeta and once you think it can’t possibly get worst you somehow make it happen… what an evil, evil talent you’ve got there. I’m really enjoying your portrayal of Piccolo (hell I like you’re portrayal of everyone, even to a small degree evil Gohan… at least he’s far more interesting then Dragon Ball Super Nerd Gohan with no muscles… Such wasted potential…, but I digress). So many yaoi fics just slop him together with Gohan like an afterthought, I like the more active mature fatherly roll you’re giving him. He’s like the voice of reason, understanding Vegeta’s want to repopulate his race without putting emotions into the equation. Of course, he’s asexual so maybe he just can’t relate or contemplate things like marriage or love; pretty sure he understand the concept of family thou. I just like how you’re making him puzzle stuff out. I like how he’s the back up in Vegeta’s plans and that he’s taking it so serious. Although, I do think perhaps you’re making the characters a wee bit too understanding. Like Vegeta has all these fears of people finding out and once it happens they’re like ‘oh no worries man we cool’. I feel like there should have been some ‘Gohan would never’ or they just couldn’t believe it without seeing it for themselves. It’s nice that Vegeta has that kind of support, but it feels a little too convenient. I also feel like there should be some gut spilling and a loud shouting match or something along the lines of “What do you mean I have kids?! Why wasn’t I told?!” in regarding Goku. I suppose that can’t happen with Vegeta unconscious and Gohan on the prowl, and maybe Vegeta’s too mentally fragile at the moment to handle that kind of confrontation but god I would think Goku would be a little more distraught that all this happened without his knowledge. He cares about Vegeta enough to push it aside when things are the way they are, but I think there should be some inner monologue or something on the matter. Basically I want Goku’s feelings, not just his regrets revolving around Gohan’s current state of being. Love all the saiyan babies and how you’re making each set specialize in one way or another. They don’t feel like the cookie cutter all powerful Mary Sue offspring many fics have. Even without names you get a pretty good feel for them and once Vegeta turns them over to their foster parents you kind of miss them and wonder how they’re doing. Okay, evil Gohan… were to start…. What a shock, seriously. Mild manner Gohan Turning that bad; I get a serious Broli vibe from him. Like gentle one moment, crazy the next only he’s more stable, he’s bad because he’s enjoying it, because he’s never felt so free. I like that you’re trying to explain it, like it’s something he just has no control over, but he seriously does seem to have control. It’s weird I’m baffled how you’re going to go about resolving this…. But, he’s coming off as such an evil character, like there’s nothing he won’t do bad, bad. I wonder what he’ll be like if he gets his way, if he breaks Vegeta totally; would that satisfy him? Would that make him possessive and protective of his ‘mate’? Would that ‘fix’ him? So many puzzles, I can’t say if I’m over thinking it or going off on weird tangents, this fic is just making me ponder and wonder too much. Anyway thanks for the read. Hope you’re writing streak keeps up and you have plenty of time and energy to feed the fans. Till then I’ll be checking for updates every couple hours like an idiot. Ja ne b-chan

Great chapter once again (it's CandyYugiohFan but with a name change). Gohan is such a dickhead, I hope Goku finds him in time to kick his ass. How come Vegeta didn't use the bit of power he had to warn Goku he was distressed. Probably saiyan pride. Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^

I love this story when is the next chapter! :)

Oh my poor Vegeta T~T and Gohan has set everything up perfectly in his favor with Goku. I really love the angst of this and the twist with Gohan is great, I have no idea how their going to deal with this problem and that's really exciting to me~

Fuck I love this fic so much! It's so sad that Vegeta felt that he was completely on his own with fighting off Gohan but he was right, Gohan had already set things up in his favor. And it was bad enough that he raped Vegeta but to add on the violation of his mind kills me. As soon as my heart felt like it was ripped out it was shoved back in and gushing over how the babies protected Vegeta from Gohans assault, especially when he called them his 'lovely ladies' ugh just destroy me with all of this! His baby girls playing mental games with Vegeta was so sweet to, they're his saving grace and it's just too perfect for words <3 My absolute favorite thing about this chapter was when Vegeta went to Piccolo for help. How Piccolo was there to support him and calm some of his anxiety was brilliant, and it was funny but sweet how he encouraged Vegeta to squeeze his arms if he needed to. I just loved the support/encouragement Piccolo gave him during the birth and how Piccolo was so amazed by Vegeta and the birth that he teared up was fantastic. Haha even when Vegeta is exhausted he finds the energy to joke with Piccolo about being soft! The second birth really had me in an emotional jumble! Vegeta was at his most vulnerable but Piccolo was supportive, understanding, and comforting through it all. I was literally feeling what they were feeling when the baby wasn't breathing, that was truly some fantastic writing. Then I was slammed with Vegeta almost dying and that was pure perfection too, god it was all perfect, I mean it was horribly sad but it was great! Now that the truth is out about Vegeta's pregnancies and Gohan's attack I'm excited to see what will happen. Gohan is planning something and Vegeta is even weaker now than he was before so he'll need to rely on the others to help him. Gah I knew I was going to love this story when I saw it was titled Atavism! I'm a huge conservation genetics nerd and I help with genetics projects for threatened/endangered species at my university, that and I completely love mpreg Vegeta so you have me hooked 100% on this <3

Fuck I love this fic so much! It's so sad that Vegeta felt that he was completely on his own with fighting off Gohan but he was right, Gohan had already set things up in his favor. And it was bad enough that he raped Vegeta but to add on the violation of his mind kills me. As soon as my heart felt like it was ripped out it was shoved back in and gushing over how the babies protected Vegeta from Gohans assault, especially when he called them his 'lovely ladies' ugh just destroy me with all of this! His baby girls playing mental games with Vegeta was so sweet to, they're his saving grace and it's just too perfect for words. My absolute favorite thing about this chapter was when Vegeta went to Piccolo for help. How Piccolo was there to support him and calm some of his anxiety was brilliant, and it was funny but sweet how he encouraged Vegeta to squeeze his arms if he needed to. I just loved the support/encouragement Piccolo gave him during the birth and how Piccolo was so amazed by Vegeta and the birth that he teared up was fantastic. Haha even when Vegeta is exhausted he finds the energy to joke with Piccolo about being soft! The second birth really had me in an emotional jumble! Vegeta was at his most vulnerable but Piccolo was supportive, understanding, and comforting through it all. I was literally feeling what they were feeling when the baby wasn't breathing, that was truly some fantastic writing. Then I was slammed with Vegeta almost dying and that was pure perfection too, god it was all perfect, I mean it was horribly sad but it was great! Now that the truth is out about Vegeta's pregnancies and Gohan's attack I'm excited to see what will happen. Gohan is planning something and Vegeta is even weaker now than he was before so he'll need to rely on the others to help him. Gah I knew I was going to love this story when I saw it was titled Atavism! I'm a huge conservation genetics nerd and I help with genetics projects for threatened/endangered species at my university, that and I completely love mpreg Vegeta so you have me hooked 100% on this! (Idk why AFF keeps messing up my review, sorry for spamming the comments section trying to get it to work)

The scene with the stillborn got my heart racing. I've been reading this and wanted to review, but this recent chapter by far kills it and so I couldn't help it. I'm not a huge m-preg fan but I like your writing style. I don't really like how mushy things tend to be, but you can do serious, and you explain yourself well, so it hasn't been so much of a bother, besides, those are just personal dislikes. I enjoy reading this story, I'm looking forward to the next update. Thanks for writing! TristaML

Welp, you just broke my heart, plus I want to vomit. I can't read anymore. Jesus Christ, I wish I could unread it.

Poor Vegeta! Goku, comfort him! COMFORT HIM!!! But at least Piccolo and Goku are aware of the situation and can protect our poor, injured prince from the monster that is now Gohan. Where have you been my whole life? Where?? Hurt/comfort, super angst fanfics are my absolute favorite and you leave me crying (in a good way!) with every chapter! Now I'm anxious to see what happens from here. Can't wait!