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by ctsama

schedule July 25, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Still here; hoping to see more soon!

schedule July 11, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Nice, nice, very nice.  I can't wait for more!  I hope you liked what you saw about U6 Saiyans...so far.

Not a geography lesson, but an astronomy one:  Blue stars happen only in supergiants; the kind that only live a few million years before going supernova...or hypernova.  In reality, a star like this could not have a native planet that would live long enough for complex life to evolve.

Stars that big burn their nuclear fuel at an amazing pace; they then began to create and burn through heavier elements before finally making and trying to burn iron.  Iron can't be used as nuclear fuel and the star chokes to death, then explodes in a supernova.  

But this is why writers have this little thing called "artistic license".  XD  You can ignore those facts if you want to, for the sake of story.

Oh...is Vegeta abandoning his old plan to introduce a few additional strains of human DNA into his people's lineage to keep their tempers under control?

Sorry you've been sick!  Was it the stomach flu?  Yecch!  Feel better!

schedule July 6, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Am still waiting....VERY VERY anxiously!....

schedule June 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Don't keep us waiting on this much longer...or at least, something for "Spaces"!!!

schedule May 24, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I am absolutely waiting for more "snapshots" here to tide over, as promised..... <<  >>

schedule May 14, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I apologize for not commenting sooner.  I'll leave a real comment later when my attention over the last several days can be returned to this series, but for now, I will say:  More please!!!

schedule May 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM

One ticket for the midnight showing, please!!!

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I'm just kidding, but I haven't forgotten!

Uh....I don't know how to make such an...AWKWARD statement....if you really want  Goku to bring Vegeta around, one of the things he MIGHT consider doing in the short term is agreeing to be uke once or twice?  Because, gee, doesn't Vegeta get a little tired of always being the passive one?

*Runs away to hide red face*  So embarrassed....

schedule April 26, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Man, I leave for half an hour and you update...at a different time of day than I know you to do, too!  :)

It's very profound.  Again, there is something in Whis...especially in this story...that makes me want to cry all the tears he never has been seen to shed.  I'm glad he's coming back to life.  

Ditto with Vegeta.

I wish I had time to say more at the moment; but I have to leave again soon.  As always, I hope for more on a speedy delivery!

schedule April 12, 2017 at 12:00 AM

You're breaking my heart here!!!  I wanted to cry sooo much after reading this!!!  It's about time; it's about damned time, really!

I was surprised to see my personal thoughts on rape echoed here.  It doesn't suddenly become consentual just because a climax was wrung out of someone during a rape...of any kind.  Orgasm is a strictly physical reaction.  Consent has nothing to do with it, and it sure as hell doesn't mean the victim enjoyed it.

As for Whis, sometimes I wonder if he ever cries himself to sleep at night in private sometimes-or if all this time, he's never been able to.  I think on so many levels, his life has been pretty dark to him.  I also wonder if this is the first time he's ever truly been able to act as a guardian angel towards any of his charges.  Maybe someone ought to remind him of that, and how effective he's been towards a friend he loves.

This recent Tournament arc just leaves me wondering a lot about how Whis really feels about the situation he's currently in with Super.  It's worse in a way because I think the warmth of Goku and everyone else, that sense of family, has penetrated something in him that was never allowed to be touched.  

These two-week waits are killing me!  (But that is a compliment, you know, right?)

schedule March 30, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Oh, wow, I am not sure what to say about this chapter!  It makes me feel sad, but my heart pounds.

I'd had a subtle idea before now, but taking things as far as another planet for the Saiyans...well, it isn't like Vegeta could swoop in and ask the other King, "Hey, may I have a few of your people to help repopulate my race, oh and maybe a male childbearer or two while you're at it?"

Oh, and what about another part of his plan...to make sure human genetics are introduced as well, to curb their offspring's tendencies they don't need any longer?  That would take a few Saiyan generations; I hope Vegeta is not in any hurry with this.  He could just as well have left them all on earth and eventually had so many kids that over time, most humans would have carried Saiyan genetics by default.  (Wasn't that a Xenoverse thing?...)  Some of his kids may not want to leave Earth anyways.  Vegeta's so embittered about his lack of choice in the past, that I don't think he'd not give his children a choice of where to live, much less who they want to love and mate with.

Yep, Bra was born!!!  She's so cute.  And now we know Whis has a very handy way of helping childbirth if something goes wrong.  I do not think that here, Whis is unaware of what's going on.  He's much too sensitive for that.  

"Intergalactic foodie".  HA!!!!  I've called Whis a foodie many times in youtube comments.

Oh, I have to get this out of my system about one more thing, a line said in the last episode:  I call absolute, utter bullshit on the Supreme Kai's line about there being only 28 planets with intelligent life in the Universe.  It makes no sense whatsoever.  Beerus wouldn't have a job at all (when at the start of Super he blew up eight and a half planets just trying to find the Super Saiyan God).  Freiza's army would have been broke in a week (when they clearly subjugated thousands of worlds).  The Galactic Patrol, small as it is, would also be out of a job.  None of this makes any sense whatsoever, and to me, he never said it, or because he is so young and inexperienced (due to U7's lack of Kais from Buu's rampage),  he's really out of touch with the mortal realm.

I can't wait for the next chapter.  Please hurry!  *Whimper*

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