Oh my goodness, I honestly did not see any of this coming... I will say im happy to see that Gohan is concerned about Goten, he's seemed so distant I thought he would never admit it. I'm eager to see what you have in plan for them now, after all of that- what a cliffhanger between these last two chapters! So many things left unexplained, and so creepy at that. Looking forward to more :)
TristaML
I've been reading this and wondering where you are going with this story. There are a lot of different things going on, what with the Saiyan Flame, Goten's supposed death, and Trunks' obvious inexperience in pretty much anything but trying to act like a badass, I'm intrigued by what you have in store and surprised this doesn't have more hits, honestly. There are a lot of Truhan fans out there and while I'm not really one of them, I still enjoy these type of fanfics. I chalk it up to this site just not being as active as it once was.
Either way, the grammar issues you explained and they don't bother me very much. I like the backdrop of the story, it leaves a lot to think about, and the fact that i can't see what's coming next is good! Anyways, all I really wanted to say was don't get discouraged, you have at least one person who wants to know what happens next.
Trista ML